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Hello,

Please go through this and give our input.

After receiving my A-Levels at Vienna Business School in International Business & Marketing I studied Tourismmanagment at Vienna University of Economics and Business Administration.
My work experience so far:
Sales & Marketing Executive for Boutique Himalalya Austrian Airlines as Customer Service Agent and Senior Ticketing Agent (currently Employed)

As I'am very much interested in International Studies, I want to
improve my international competitiveness and fulfill my desire to
challenging field of ever changing business. I'am convinced that a uk study will provide me with a high-quality education and prepare myself to continue a sucessful career and I'am
convinced that a UK Study would provide me with fundamental knowledge and Skills.
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PLS DO NOT post the same thing TWICE!

If you don't get an answer, wait or post an attention/notice in the same thread.
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Sand-dumesAfter receiving my A-Levels at Vienna Business School in International Business & Marketing, I studied Tourismmanagment at Vienna University of Economics and Business Administration.

My work experience so far:
Sales & Marketing Executive for Boutique Himalalya Austrian Airlines as Customer Service Agent and Senior Ticketing Agent (currently Employed)


As I'am very much interested in International Studies, I want to improve my international competitiveness and fulfill my desire to challenging field of ever changing business. I'am convinced that a uk study will provide me with a high-quality education and prepare myself to continue a sucessful career and I'am convinced that a UK Study would provide me with fundamental knowledge and Skills.

Comments:
1. Check typos / capitalization.
2. Rewrite the part in blue. Start your sentence with "I am currently employed by / working at .... as ...."
3. You wrote: fulfill my desire to challenging field - Did you mean '...fulfill my desire to meet challenging ...'?
4. Check the logic of the sentence, which starts with 'As'.
5. You allso wrote 'I am convinced ..." twice. Could you try to combine your thoughts in one sentence?
6. 'a UK sudy' could also mean 'a research done in the UK'. Some might say it is clear for the context that you wrote; but I would suggest that you replace it.