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It's formal email (querry) to university. Could anyone check it ? I'd be greatful.
It's here:

My name is Adam Smith. I am applying to the University of Brema on the following course: xxx. You have received my application on 23rd March but I have not received results so far. Could you tell (?) me when application will be considered ?

I would be glad if you could let me have information on this.

Of course, if you have not a vacancy for this course, please send me more details about other.

Yours faithfully.
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Hi,

My name is Adam Smith. I am applying to the University of Brema on the following course: xxx. You have received my application on 23rd March but I have not received results so far. Could you tell (?) me when application will be considered ?

I would be glad if you could let me have information on this.

Of course, if you have not a vacancy for this course, please send me more details about other.

Yours faithfully.

My application for xxxx was received by you on 23rd March. I would be very grateful if you could let me know when I will receive further information.

( Of course, if you have not a vacancy for this course, please send me more details about other. I wouldn't say this here. It sounds like you lack confidence.)

Yours sincerely,

Adam Smith
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Students: Are you brave enough to let our tutors analyse your pronunciation?
Yours sincerely,

Are you sure ?
Hi,

In my experience, 'Yours faithfully' is rarely used these days. It looks quite old-fashioned to me, and totally inappropriate in a modern form of communication such as email.

Clive