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Now, come to think of it, not considering the reason behind, it was quite unfair to her, given that she came all the way, travelled 700 miles, to a totally different state and city to work for him.

I know the sentence is fragmented. But I wonder if it's understandable to native speakers. And if it's also common in daily conversations. I've heard so many fragmented sentences but I don't think I have any idea how to form them correctly. Are there any rules? My believe is when you want to emphasize some points which you've just articulated but Ooops...you think they are not clear, you would pause which is indicated by a comma in writing and follow with elaboration and once you're done, you end it with another pause and go back to your original thought. Though it's ugly in writing, I feel it's quite important in conversation to make your point. Of course, if you can speak as good as you write, there's no need for this ugliness. But at the moment, this is a quick fix for me while I continue to polish my English. Please be honest. Thanks in advance.

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No, I got lost halfway. Basically, it is too long to work. The relationships between fragments are lost without additional punctuation, a few conjunctions or other discourse markers. Of course, that \may be because I am reading it. It is not acceptable in good written language because it is not accompanied by the pauses, gestures, etc that would make it clear when spoken. But I don't think that you have punctuated it in a way that accurately reflects how it would be spoken, anyway.
Now, come to think of it, not considering the reason behind, it was quite unfair to her, given that she came all the wayto a totally different state and city to work for him -- travelling 700 miles

MM, is it better now? If not, could you rephrase it?

not considering the reason behind means not taking into account the reason she got fired because the writer couldn't recall the reason.
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I'm not sure what you are looking to accomplish, New2. What do you mean by 'better'?
You have a lot of unnecessary verbiage in your sentence. If your intent is to make as complex a sentence as possible and have it still be understandable you're on your own. It you want to be understood try this:

Now, come to think of it, not considering the reason behind, It was quite unfair to her, given that she traveled seven hundred miles (to a came all the way to a totally different state and city) to work for him. -- travelling 700 miles

Hi N2G,
What are you trying to gain by using fragmented sentences in string? The "sentence" is too drawn-out and distracting which makes it tiresome to read. Some of the fragments are actually adverbial phrases which when used properly can enhance the senence but
too many is overbearing.
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Well... I hate to say things that are in not in harmony with other people on this forum whose opinions I highly respect, but actually, a lot of my first drafts in fiction writing read like this, so yes, some natives do do this. Without fail, my writers group says "Barb, your sentences are way the f*** too long" (they don't always swear when they say it but the emphasis remains) so I have to break them down into smaller ones.

Here's a monster from one I wrote describing an illegal dumping run my sister and I made to the local supermarket after my grandmother died and we had to do something with all the stuff in her kitchen: So, with something like eight or ten big black trash bags, most piled in trunk, the lid left open to accommodate as many as possible, with the rest in the back seat, we set out under cover of darkness for the Piggly Wiggly

Here's another got that hacked down to two or three sentences: Even in Portland, Maine, which had its share of eccentrics, people did not generally walk the streets wearing what for all at the world looked like a red and gold tablecloth fastened with a broach the size and shape of a gold-plated flowerpot about their necks, and earrings that looked like pirate’s doubloons dangling from their earlobes.

I always think I'm being clever. Then I put it aside and read it three days later and say "Oh my God. What was I thinking? No reader will have the patience to make their way through that."
I think your long sentences are clever, Barb, because they build to a climax. In the first sentence, the ludicrous contrast of "under cover of darkness" with "Piggly Wiggly" (could there be a more hilarious grocery store name?) provides the "reward" for plowing through the duller first part of the sentence. (Although I think I would take out "with the rest in the back seat.") In the second sentence, the convoluted description of the costume is funny precisely because it goes on so long. IMO, anyway. Maybe it's a good thing I'm not in your writers' group. Emotion: smile

N2G, not to be unkind, but it doesn't look like your example is trying to use sentence length for any literary effect. Are you trying to duplicate native speech? If I'm writing something like this, in an email to a friend, for example, I tend to use dashes instead of so many commas. Sometimes I use parentheses. I know people who use ellipses but those get on my nerves. Emotion: smile

Now, come to think of it (not considering the reason behind) it was quite unfair to her, given that she came all the way-travelled 700 miles, to a totally different state and city-to work for him.
I appreciate that so many experts responded to my question. Thank you, MM, RayH, Goodman, GG, Delmobile.

I do not intend to complicate my sentences. I've heard native speakers saying sentences like this. I thought it was OK to put them in writing word for word.

MM, if I understand your comment correctly, you write differently than you speak.

Delmobile, I have to say I love your comment. I should have used parentheses and dashes. Yes, I was trying to duplicate native speech. Maybe I gave a poor example. Could you give me a good example, of course good in the sense of being complicated and informal like in an email or a casual conversation?

Thanks
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