Learning, a word that is very easy to understand because each of us is and has been learning but to understand the real meaning of learning, it’s another story. Learning is very familiar to everyone, we can see many parents force their children to go to school and hope in the future they can make money. So what is learning? why learning is so meaningful? Well, like other kids, I were expected to study well when I was young so that I could go to university, had a seat at a good company with a steady salary and lived a normal life but every day behold the youth can’t find out the beauty of knowledge, underrated the education, don’t understand their responsibilities to their country, their family and themselves, some children want to go to school but they have a financial burden that prevents their chances to be successful and seeing society out there is full of injustice, dolorous and despair makes my heartbroken, I’m thinking a lot about I want to do something to fix this situation, I want everyone to know that we learning not to make money or because our parents tell us to learn, we learn so that we can find out who we are, to gain a fascinating insight into our civilization, how diverse and colourful the world is and learn how to love yourself, to nurture our soul. That the reasons promote me to be a teacher, I want to complete my knowledge, get a passionate and dedicated Finnish’s education, have the opportunity to change the future, the world. I believe if we recognize the large value that learning brings, the world will be better.

This essay is just for practising to improve my writing skill. Could you please correct my grammars, structures and so on. Thank you so much.

Essay

Learning, a word that is very easy to understand because each of us is and has been learning but to

understand the real meaning of learning, it’s another story. Learning is very familiar to everyone, we can

see many parents force their children to go to school and hope in the future they can make money. So

what is learning? why learning is so meaningful? Well, like other kids, I were expected to study well

when I was young so that I could go to university, had a seat at a good company with a steady salary and

lived a normal life but every day behold the youth can’t find out the beauty of knowledge, underrated

the education, don’t understand their responsibilities to their country, their family and themselves,

some children want to go to school but they have a financial burden that prevents their chances to be

successful and seeing society out there is full of injustice, dolorous and despair makes my heartbroken,

I’m thinking a lot about I want to do something to fix this situation, I want everyone to know that we

learning not to make money or because our parents tell us to learn, we learn so that we can find out

who we are, to gain a fascinating insight into our civilization, how diverse and colourful the world is and

learn how to love yourself, to nurture our soul. That the reasons promote me to be a teacher, I want to

complete my knowledge, get a passionate and dedicated Finnish’s education, have the opportunity to

change the future, the world. I believe if we recognize the large value that learning brings, the world will

be better.

Learning, a word that is very easy to understand because each of us is and has been learning but to understand the real meaning of learning, it’s another story.


Your first sentence is ungrammatical. It does not have a proper clause structure. Here are the elements

1. Learning, (That is the subject)

2. a word that is very easy to understand because each of us is and has been learning ] (This is a long appositive noun phrase)

3. but (That is a coordinating conjunction. But the predicate of the first main clause is missing.)

4. to understand the real meaning of learning, (That is another subject. A to-infinitive clause)

5. it’s another story. (That is another main clause. The previous predicate is missing.)

The sentence needs to be revised into grammatical English.

Learning is (verb) a word that is very easy to understand because each of us is and has been learning but to understand the real meaning of learning it’s is another story.



Learning is very familiar to everyone, (comma splice error) we can see many parents force their children to go to school and hope in the future they can make money. So what is learning? why learning is so meaningful?

(ungrammatical interrogative sentence)

Well, like other kids, I were (wrong verb form) expected to study hard well when I was young so that I could go to university, had (wrong verb form) a seat (wrong word) at a good company with a steady salary and lived (wrong verb form) a normal life but every day behold the youth (Your sentence has become ungrammatical. I do not understand this) can’t find out (wrong verb) the beauty of knowledge, underrated the education, ( I do not understand this)) don’t understand their responsibilities to their country, their family and themselves, (comma splice error) some children want to go to school but they have a financial burden cannot afford it (run-on sentence) hat prevents their chances (wrong phrase. Chance just happens. We cannot prevent it.) to be successful and seeing society out there is full of injustice, dolorous (wrong word) and despair makes my heartbroken, (wrong usage, comma splice error) I’m thinking a lot about I want to do something (ungrammatical) to fix this situation, (comma splice error) I want everyone to know that we learning (ungrammatical) not to make money or because our parents tell us to learn, (comma splice error) we learn so that we can find out who we are, to gain a fascinating insight into our civilization, how diverse and colourful the world is and learn how to love yourself, to nurture our soul. That the reasons promote me to be a teacher, (ungrammatical) I want to complete my knowledge, get a passionate and dedicated Finnish’s (wrong form) education, have the opportunity to change the future, the world. I believe if we recognize the large value that learning brings, the world will be better.

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Thank you very much. With a lot of mistakes, I need to improve my writing harder.

I am trying to rewrite it. Do you think it is better? Thank you so much.


Learning is a word that is very easy to understand because each of us is and has been learning but to understand the real meaning of learning, is another story. Learning is very familiar to everyone. We can see many parents force their children to go to school and hope in the future they can make money. So what is learning? Why is learning so meaningful? Well, like other kids, I was expected to study diligently when I was young so that I could go to university, have a seat at a good company with a steady salary and live a normal life. But deep into my heart, witnessing the young generation can not recognize the beauty of knowledge, underestimate the education, do not understand their responsibilities to their country, their family and themselves or some children want to go to school but they have a financial burden that prevents them from being successful and seeing society out there is full of injustice and despair because of selfishness, heartlessness make me excruciating pain. I am thinking a lot what I want to do to fix this situation, I want everyone to know that the reason why we learn is not to get the degrees or because we have to do the same thing as other people. But learning is the most important key to find out who we are, learn how to love ourselves, nurture our souls and gain a fascinating insight into life. Those are the reasons that motivate me to become a teacher, I want to perfect my knowledge, help “lost” students on the right route, spread the moral and humanities value. I believe if we recognize the large value that learning brings, the world will be better.

Learning is a word that is very easy to understand because each of us is and has been learning, but to understand the real meaning of learning, (no comma. Never put a comma between the subject and the verb. e.g. Hai Dong, is my name. is another story. Learning is very familiar to everyone. We can see many parents force their children to go to school and hope that in the future they can will make money. So what is learning? Why is learning so meaningful? Well, like other kids, I was expected to study diligently when I was young so that I could go to university, have a job / career/ position seat at a good company with a steady salary and live a normal life. But deep in into my heart, witnessing the young generation can not recognize the beauty of knowledge, underestimate the education, do not understand their responsibilities to their country, their family and themselves or some children want to go to school but they have a financial burden that prevents them from being successful and seeing society out there is full of injustice and despair because of selfishness, heartlessness make me excruciating pain.

(When you write such excruciatingly long sentences, there is a high likelihood that they will not be grammatical. This one has awkward phrasing and is not grammatical. The first clause has no predicate. The second is wrong, too.)

I am thinking a lot what I want to do to fix this situation, (You did not fix the comma splice error. I believe you make this mistake a lot and do not recognize it.) I want everyone to know that the reason why we learn is not to get the degrees or because we have to do the same thing as other people. But learning is the most important key to find out who we are, learn how to love ourselves, nurture our souls and gain a fascinating insight into life. Those are the reasons that motivate me to become a teacher, (You did not fix the comma splice error. I believe you make this mistake a lot and do not recognize it.)I want to perfect my knowledge, help “lost” students on the right route, spread the moral and humanities value. I believe if we recognize the large value that learning brings, the world will be better.

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