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Please proofread for a friend of mine. Thank you. He says thank you too:

How are you? Hope you are doing well. I'm writing this email to you because my father recently passed away and that made me drop my Philosophy course for a third time. I really didn't want to, but because of his death, I couldn't force myself to go to school anymore. My mind's been a blank since he passed a way a week ago. He was a very important and irreplaceable part of our family. My dad never went to a four year university and that was why it was his dream for my sister and I to attend one, but now I have no chance of transferring, because the one grade I needed to make up was the "D" I received in Philosophy. I really should've thought it through before I made such a rash decision, but I wasn't in the mood to live life anymore, so I did what I thought was right at the time. Ironically, that was the worse thing I could've done, both eliminating my hopes of transferring to a higher education and never being able to fulfill the dream my father had for me. I don't understand why SJSU had to effect this new add/drop rule, because students pay tuition to learn and I don't think it should matter how many times it takes us to do well in a course as long as they try hard to pass it. It doesn't make sense to pay for units just to flush the opportunity down the toilet. The only requirement for me to transfer to the schools I've applied to is to make up this Philosophy course, so please tell me what I could possibly do to repeat this course one final time this summer. This is my only chance to move on with my life and I know I can do well, because before my father died, I was doing good in school. I can provide my dad's death certificate if I have to, but please do keep it private, because it's not something our family would like to share the world with.
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Hi,

To be truthful, I just can't get interested in reading what seems to be a big, unorganized paragraph.

Can you persuade your friend to try to organize her thoughts in a more reader-friendly way, and then give it to you to repost? For a start, she should begin by saying why she is writing this, and what action she wants from the reader.

ie a series of paragraphs, each focused on one aspect of her thinkng.

A philosophy student needs to learn to think and to express herself clearly. Otherwise, she will fail her course again.

Clive

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CliveHi,To be truthful, I just can't get interested in reading what seems to be a big, unorganized paragraph.Can you persuade your friend to try to organize her thoughts in a more reader-friendly way, and then give it to you to repost? For a start, she should begin by saying why she is writing this, and what action she wants from the reader.ie a series of paragraphs, each focused on one aspect of her thinkng.A philosophy student needs to learn to think and to express herself clearly. Otherwise, she will fail her course again.Cliveer
Maybe he doesn't know how to organize his thoughts academically and that's why we post our essays and homework assignments here for you experts to review and critique.
Hi,

I've given your friend what I think is good advice, just as I have done my best with all the other queries you have posted on this Forum.
If she makes an effort to follow my advice, I'd be happy to spend my time checking her efforts. But I'm not going to do all the work.

Clive