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Task: You saw an advertisement for a training course in the US, but you have one or two problems and can't stay the whole course.
Write a letter to the course director. In your letter:
- explain your interest in the course
- describe your problems
- find out if a refund is possible

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing to request your assistance concerning the matter of a Chinese training course, which I saw in an advertisement yesterday and I wonder if you can possibly help me solve my personal problems.

First of all, I am a freshman majoring in English and have recently won a place in my favorite university. However, apart from English, my school also requires each student to learn their second language; therefore, I make a decision to study Chinese, which is believed to be growing in popularity nowadays. Fortunately, I found an interesting course that your institution has just opened, which I am really into the learning methods in this curriculum. As far as I concerned, your online course systems are provided with high quality and render a variety of accessible options of diverse courses with different levels, as well as being rapidly fixed when having trouble with technology or the internet. As you mentioned in the advertisement, not only does your Chinese training online course have a group of well-qualified teachers, but it also gives students available learning materials, as well as references. Especially, the view of each lesson is costly effective and unlimited, which makes a huge difference with other correspondent courses. Thus, training online in your reputed university would provide me an opportunity to widen my knowledge, improve my skills and definitely boost my career prospect.

However, I am getting trouble that I cannot finish the whole lesson due to my studying schedule in the next semester. As a student of English faculty, I am put under a lot of pressure with the homework and running deadlines every passing day. What is more, I have to deal with other subjects; therefore, time-management is seemed to be very difficult for me. To get living expenses and obtain more valuable experiences, I have just applied for a teaching assistant recently, so it will be really hard to balance studying and working a part-time job. Moreover, in the second year, I have to face the increase in difficulty levels, which means the more skills I have to focus on, the more burden I carry.

As you know, I am unable to stay the whole course, so I wonder if the refund is possible in my situation. I hope you will understand my circumstance because I do not have a good living condition, as well as the living cost in my country is very high. I extremely fancy your course and want to continuously study but I cannot owing to the limit of my time.

I am looking forward to hearing from you soon and hope you will take my situation into consideration.

Yours faithfully,
Huong

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I would never write a letter like this.

It is far too long and has many irrelevant details. A business letter should be clear and concise; otherwise you disrespect the reader's time. In your letter, the recipient has to read a lot of stuff before they understand your dilemma. Also, you are asking for a refund when you have not paid them anything. That makes no sense. Usually we ask for a refund if we paid for something, but cannot use it and return the item.

Of course, I understand it is to practice your English, and for that purpose, it is OK. It will never be sent in reality!


Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing to request your assistance concerning the matter of a Chinese training course, which I saw in an advertisement yesterday and I wonder if you can possibly help me solve my personal problems. (Personal problems are things like an argument with your family, a severe illness and problems with money. You should be specific that it is not a problem yet, but a future problem if you enroll in the course.)

First of all, I am a freshman majoring in English and have recently won a place in my favorite university. However, apart from English, my school also requires each student to learn a their second language; therefore, I made make a decision to study Chinese, which is believed to be growing in popularity nowadays. Fortunately, I found an interesting course that your institution has just opened, which I am really into (That is very informal language.) the learning methods in this curriculum. As far as I am concerned, your online courses systems are provided with high quality and have render a variety of accessible options of diverse courses with different levels, as well as being reliable and consistently available. rapidly fixed when having trouble with technology or the internet. As you mentioned in the advertisement, not only does your Chinese training online course have a group of well-qualified teachers, but it also gives students course available learning materials, as well as references. Especially, the view of each lesson is costly effective (Costly means that it is very very expensive.) and unlimited, which makes a huge difference when compared with other correspondence courses. Thus, training online in your reputed university would provide me an opportunity to widen my knowledge, improve my skills and definitely boost my career prospects.

However, I am getting trouble anticipate that I cannot finish the whole course lesson due to my studying schedule in the next semester. As a student of English faculty, I am put under a lot of pressure with the homework and running deadlines every passing day. What is more, I have to deal with other subjects; therefore, time-management is seemed wrong form) is a challenge. to be very difficult for me. To earn my get living expenses and obtain more valuable experiences, gain teaching experience, I have just applied for a teaching assistant job recently, (Do not put two time adverbs in the same clause.) so it will be really hard to balance studying and working a part-time job. Moreover, in the second year, my courses' level of difficulty will increase, I have to face the increase in difficulty levels, which means that I will have to devote more time to my studies. the more skills I have to focus on, the more burden I carry.

As you know, I am unable to complete stay the whole course, so I wonder if a the refund is possible in my situation. I hope you will understand my circumstance because I do not have a good living condition, as well as the living costs in my country is very high. I extremely fancy your course and want to do the entire program, continuously study but I cannot owing to my time constraints. the limit of my time.

I am looking forward to hearing from you soon and hope you will take my situation into consideration.

Yours faithfully,
Huong

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Huong Tran 4191Task: You saw an advertisement for a training course in the US, but you have one or two problems and can't stay the whole course.
Write a letter to the course director. In your letter:
- explain your interest in the course
- describe your problems
- find out if a refund is possible


Dear Sir/Madam,


I am writing to request your assistance regarding a Chinese course which I saw in an advertisement yesterday. I hope that you could help me solve a few problems.


I was recently admitted to my favorite university and am a freshman majoring in English. However, in addition to English, my school requires that I learn a second language, so I decided to study Chinese, which I believe is becoming more popular. Fortunately, I found an interesting course which your institution just opened, the learning methods of which intrigue me. Your online courses are of high quality and offer a variety of accessible and diverse courses at different levels, backed by rapid and effective technical support. As was mentioned in the advertisement, not only are your online Chinese courses taught by well-qualified teachers, they also provide students with learning materials and references. Each lesson is cost-effective and unlimited,
in stark contrast to other correspondence courses. Thus, training online at your reputable university would provide me with an opportunity to widen my knowledge, improve my skills and boost my career prospects.

However, I have a problem in that I cannot finish the whole course due to my academic schedule next semester. As an English language student, I am under a lot of pressure from daily homework and deadlines. Furthermore, I must study other subjects; therefore, time management is very difficult for me. To earn living expenses and acquire valuable experience, I just applied for a teaching assistant position, so it will be hard to balance study and work. Moreover, my coursework will become more difficult in my second year, meaning the more skills I must focus on, the heavier a burden I must carry.

As I am unable to stay for the whole course, I wonder if a partial refund might be possible. I live in poor conditions, and the cost of living in my country is very high. I want very much to take your course to completion, but I cannot, owing to a lack of time.

I look forward to hearing from you soon, and I hope you will take my circumstances into consideration.

Warmest regards,


Huong

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Thank you for your useful comments. Should I shorten my letter?
Huong Tran 4191 Thank you for your useful comments. Should I shorten my letter?

If it is a real letter, do shorten it.
If it is just an exercise for your English class, it is not necessary to do so.

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