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Dear teachers,

Could you please correct my paragraph below if anything is wrong in the use of words and grammar?:

Yesterday I had a sprained ankle and the school principal gave me one day off school .Today my ankle still hurts/aches when walking, so I asked the principal to give me one more day off / one extra day off , but he refused . He said that if I wanted to have one day off/ one extra day off, my father or mother had to come to see him in person .

Thank you inadvance
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Here are my suggestions:

Yesterday I sprained my ankle and the school principal gave me one day off from school. Today my ankle still hurts when I walk, so I asked the principal to give me one more day off / another day off, but he refused. He said that if I wanted to have an additional day off, my father or mother had to come to see him in person.

One more note:
You should not leave a space between a period/full stop and the last word in a sentence. Only leave a space after the period.
Is it correct if you say:

Yesterday I sprained my ankle and the school principal had given me one day off from school.
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Thank you Yankee very much, but could you explain why "an extra day off " is impossible here?
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Yesterday I sprained my ankle and the school principal had given me one day off from school.
No, the past perfect is not called for here.
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When we use past perfect,does it really require two situations? Do we really have to use conjunctions like because and before?
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Hi Tuongvan

You could use "an extra day off" in the last sentence, I suppose, but I think "additional" or "another" work better. The word "extra" tends to be used to refer to something that is "more than is actually expected or necessary". In your sentence, the student with the sprained ankle seems to believe that an additional day off is necessary, so "extra" doesn't seem like the best choice of words to me.
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When we use past perfect,does it really require two situations?-- Yes, somewhere in the context, though not necessarily in the same sentence.

Do we really have to use conjunctions like because and before?-- Yes, if you intend to use any complex sentences.
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Hi,

I find the part "Today my ankle still hurts when I walk, so I asked the principal to give me one more day off / another day off, but he refused." bad in terms of tenses. I think it is better if written as "Today my ankle was still hurting when I walked, so I asked the principal to give me one more day off / another day off, but he refused."

The word "so" seems to give me the impression that a past tense tense and/or past continuous tense are/is needed. What do you think?

Thank you.
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