Nowadays, global warming has become a controversial topic in modern society. It is ordinarily believed that the ocean surface is continuously rising at an alarming rate. This essay will discuss the potential problems of global warming and conjure several solutions. It is undeniable that climate change has caused severe repercussions to humanity and wildlife.

It is effortlessly observable that the loss of habitats and rising sea level is emerging as a major threat. For example, in 2018, over 300,000 square meters of glaciers have vanished, which was the territory of over 1,000 polar bears. Thus, polar fauna is on the verge of being entirely annihilated owing to gradually diminishing habitable areas. Apart from it, climate change can lead to soil salinity, which poses significant adversities to the locals. To cite an instance, it is predicted that in 2100, Ca Mau and several other cities in the vicinity of the ocean would experience drastic soil salinity, which would make mentioned area unable to be utilized for agricultural purposes. Hence, the foreseeable famine is not a fictional vision anymore.

Regarding to the problems caused by global warming, it is wise to conjure several possible solutions. First action to resolve this issue is for the government to enact a law forcing industrial firms to purify exhausted fume before releasing into the atmosphere. This would decrease the annual carbon footprint, which is the main factor contributing to global warming. Secondly, authorities are able to fund scientific research to procrastinate or potentially nullify the detrimental effect of the rising ocean surface.

In conclusion, humanity and wildlife are experiencing the repercussions caused by climate change and global warming, from habitat loss to extinction and famine. However, these effects are reversible if proper actions are applied.

Nowadays, global warming has become a controversial topic in modern society. It is ordinarily believed that the ocean surface is continuously rising at an alarming rate. This essay will discuss the potential problems of global warming and conjure several solutions. It is undeniable that climate change has caused severe repercussions to humanity and wildlife.

The prompt treats global wamig as a proven fact, and just asks you to write about poblems and solutions. So, your first sentence is veering off topic.

Yourintrouction should gve your thesis statement, ie sum up your answer to this prompt. The ret of your essay will try to proe that your thesis is correct

Don't refer explicitly to 'this essay', the reader knows it .Is an essay.


I' m having computer problems so I can't write any more. Sorry. Tryt o improve your introduction. and rpeost it in this thread. Don't start a new thread, please.

Clive


Your first body paragraph should address the most serious problem. Is it really 'the loss of habitats and rising sea level?/

Thank you! I now realized that I've mistaken problems and solutions with discussing problems.

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It is effortlessly observable that Just state these thngs as facts.sl is emerging as a major threat. For example, in 2018, over 300,000 square meters of glaciers have vanished, which was the territory of over 1,000 polar bears. Thus, polar fauna are on the verge of being entirely annihilated owing to gradually diminishing habitable areas. Apart from it,<<<< what does 'it' refer to? climate change can lead to soil salinity, which poses significant adversities to the locals. To cite an instance, it is predicted that in 2100, Ca Mau and several other cities (in what country re these cities? Which ocean?) )in the vicinity of the ocean will experience drastic soil salinity, which will prevent these areas from being used for agricultural purposes. Hence, the foreseeable famine is not a a fictional vision anymore.

Are 'a predition' and 'a fictional vision' the same thing?

It sounds odd to say that cities will experince soil saliniy. Pehaps you could say regions or countries?


So, th problems you have listed as major are

1. Loss of habitats

2. Rising sea leve


3. Famine

You haven't mentioned air polltion or the carbon footprint, yet what you talk about in the next paragraph.


Regarding to the problems caused by global warming, it is wise to conjure There are several possible solutions. The first action to resolve this issue is for the government (just one government?) to enact a law forcing industrial firms to purify exhaust fumes before releasing them into the atmosphere.


>>>If the carbon footprint is the most mportant factor, it should form part of your inroduction. ,<<<<


Secondly, authorities are able to fund scientific research to procrastinate is not a suitable word here. Do you mean 'delay'?

?or potentially nullify the detrimental effect of the rising ocean surface.

In conclusion, humanity and wildlife are experiencing the repercussions caused by climate change and global warming, from habitat loss to extinction and famine. However, these effects are reversible if proper actions are applied.

Your conclusion should refer back to your introduction.

Have you done what the examiner asked you to do?

Have you shown that your thesis staementistru?

Clive

I've been writing in a formula which was from my former teacher. So, I know that I shouldn't depend on it too much but somehow it became a habit. Therefore, your corrections to my essay are so helpful

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Put it with your answer in the message body.

Subject: Please review my IELTS essay

Message body:
Topic:

GLOBAL WARMING IS ONE OF THE BIGGEST THREATS HUMANS FACE IN THE 21ST CENTURY, AND SEA LEVELS ARE CONTINUING TO RISE AT ALARMING RATES. WHAT PROBLEMS ARE ASSOCIATED WITH THIS AND WHAT ARE SOME POSSIBLE SOLUTIONS.

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Nowadays, global warming has become a controversial topic in modern society. (This is a memorized response. Examiners know that you will use this pattern for all opinion essays. They do not reward this kind of response. Write a sentence that convinces them that you understand the topic and have your own opinion about it.) It is ordinarily believed has been observed that the ocean surface is continuously rising at an alarming rate. This essay will discuss the potential problems of global warming and conjure several solutions. It is undeniable that climate change has caused severe repercussions to humanity and wildlife.

Never mention your essay. The examiner knows you are writing an essay. They know the topic. Do not tell them what they know! Write your thesis statement, that is the answer to the essay prompt. This is a two-part topic. Yu must address both questions.

It is effortlessly observable that the loss of habitats and rising sea level is emerging as a major threat (To whom? to what?) . For example, in 2018, over 300,000 square meters of glaciers have vanished, which was the territory of over 1,000 polar bears. Thus, polar wildlife fauna is on the verge of being entirely annihilated owing to gradually diminishing habitable areas. Apart from it, In addition, climate change can lead to soil salinity, which poses significant adversities to the locals. To cite an instance, it is predicted that in 2100, Ca Mau and several other cities in the vicinity of the ocean would experience drastic soil salinity, which would make mentioned (Do not use this word. Do not use aforementioned or above mentioned, or similar.)the surrounding area unsuitable unable to be utilized for agricultural purposes. Hence, the foreseeable famine is entirely likely. not a fictional vision anymore.

Regarding to the problems caused by global warming, it is wise to conjure (wrong words) several possible solutions. The first action to resolve this issue is for the government to enact a law forcing industrial firms to purify exhausted fume remove CO2 and other harmful gasses and particles from their exhaust before releasing it into the atmosphere. This would decrease the country's annual carbon footprint, which is the main factor contributing to global warming. Secondly, authorities are able have to fund scientific research to procrastinate (wrong word) or potentially nullify the detrimental effect of the rising ocean surface.

In conclusion, humanity people and wildlife are experiencing the repercussions caused by climate change and global warming, from habitat loss to extinction of species and famine. However, these effects are reversible if proper actions are applied. (I doubt that extinctions can be reversed...)

This is my rewritten essay, and if you could mark this as an Ielts test, It would be great

Nowadays, global warming has become an insurmountable problem mankind has ever encounter. Therefore, its destructive effects bring about numerous aftermaths namely climate change and air pollution. However, mentioned consequences are evadible owing to different governments and citizens actions.

It is a fact that the problems concerning atmosphere contamination and abrupt climate changes are emerging as major menaces. First of all, well being of humanity would gradually diminish due to exacerbated quality of air. For example, an industrial region in Dong Nai province has recorded an anomalous upsurge of heavy metal and coal soot particles in the air. Thus, city dwellers would suffocate from or gradually be poisoned by the ordinary atmosphere. Apart from the referred problem, unexpected climate phenomena are able to cause crop failure, which poses significant adversities to the locals. To cite an instance, in 1945 in Vietnam, a sudden winter causes a wide range of crops to yield insufficient amount of sustenance, which later on result in a devastating famine. As a result, millions of people met their demises which are effortlessly preventable with proper actions.

Regarding the problems caused by global warming, universal authorities and residents could endeavour to adopt several possible solutions. The first action to resolve this issue is for the governments to enact a law that mandates industrial firms to purify exhausted fumes before releasing them into the atmosphere. Consequently, the annual level of carbon footprint, which is the main factor contributing to air pollution, will decrease over time. Secondly, responsible organizations are able to fund scientific research to predict abnormal weather phenomena and propose efficacious solutions. Hence, famine and other repercussions are able be cancelled since their dawns.

In conclusion, humanity is experiencing the results caused by global warming such as air pollution, climate change and famine. Nevertheless, responsible and decent actions are requested to solve these issues.

Nowadays, global warming has become an insurmountable problem (An unsurmountable problem is one that has no possible solutions, so you can stop writing your essay right here.) mankind has ever encounter. (wrong form) Therefore, its destructive effects bring about numerous aftermaths (unnatural) namely climate change and air pollution. (Global warming does not cause air pollution. You have it backwards.) However, mentioned (Do not use this word as an adjective. Native speakers do not use it this way. It is a past tense verb. e.g. I mentioned to my boss that he ...) consequences are evadible owing to different if governments and citizens take some immediate actions.

It is a fact that (avoid these dummy-it clauses. It add nothing to your essay.) The problems created by air pollution concerning atmosphere contamination and abrupt climate changes are emerging as major menaces. First of all, well being of humanity would gradually diminish due to exacerbated (wrong word) quality of air. For example, an industrial region in Dong Nai province has recorded an anomalous upsurge unacceptably high level of heavy metal and coal soot particles in the air. Thus, city dwellers residents of the area would suffer from lung damage suffocate from or gradually be poisoned by the ordinary atmosphere. Apart from this the referred problem, (Referred is unnatural. Like "mentioned" do not use it. Use demonstrative adjectives. That is what they are for.) unexpected severe storms and heat waves climate phenomena (wrong expression) are able to cause crop failure, which poses significant threats to the local food supply and bankruptcy of the farmers. adversities to the locals. (wrong expression. Write actual things that can happen instead of vague words.) To cite an instance, in 1945 in Vietnam, a sudden (wrong word) colder and longer than usual winter caused a wide range of crops to yield insufficient amounts of vegetables, fruit and rice, of sustenance, (wrong word ) which later on resulted in a devastating famine. As a result, (repetitious) Millions of people died. If climate change continues unabated, this could happen on a regular basis all over the world. met their demises (wrong expression). which are effortlessly preventable with proper actions. .

Regarding the problems caused by global warming, universal (wrong word) authorities and residents individuals could endeavour to adopt several possible solutions. The first action to resolve this issue is for the governments to enact a law that mandates industrial firms to purify remove greenhouse gasses and particles from their smoke exhausted fumes before releasing them into the atmosphere. Consequently, the annual level of carbon footprint, (The carbon footprint is the per-person emission of CO2 gasses. Those gases are not pollutants. Carbon dioxide is required for trees and plants to grow. ) which is the main factor contributing to global warming air pollution, will decrease over time. Secondly, Second, responsible organizations are able to fund scientific research should be funded to predict abnormal weather phenomena and propose efficacious solutions. Hence, famine and other repercussions are able be cancelled (wrong word) since their dawns. (wrong expression)

In conclusion, humanity is experiencing the results caused by global warming such as air pollution, climate change and famine. Nevertheless, responsible and decent actions are requested to solve these issues.

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