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One of the most concerns of humans at the present time may be global warming. This essay will discuss further the main reasons causing global warming and give some possible solutions.

The predominant factor resulting in the warming of the earth is carbon dioxide (CO2) emission which is caused by the major human activities. An obvious example, the burning of fossil fuel to make electronics have generated a large amount of CO2. According to an environmental report in the US in 2000, coal-burning power plants produced about 2000 billion tons of carbon dioxide every year. In addition, a different huge amount of CO2 is emitted by industrial zones. Another example of those emissions is the transportation sector. The rise of human movement demand these days has led to increase the number of vehicles on the streets. Additionally, cheap air travel is attracting more and more people. Consequently, the amount of CO2 has released into the atmosphere. That lead to the temperature of the earth is hotter.

There are some solutions to solve these problems or at least reduce the effects. Firstly, governments should ban the using energy from fossil fuel burning strictly and alter these powers via the environmentally friendly resources such as wind, tide, and solar. Furthermore, governments need to enforce laws to restrict pollutants emission in manufactories. Secondly, individuals can play a part role in global warming reduction by changing lifestyles. Regarding transport, people should use means of transport which are run out by solar energy or biodiesel and just use when really necessary. Moreover, the using led – bulbs, turning off all electrical devices when going out can help.

In conclusion, although global warming is a serious problem, there are steps that governments and individuals can take to reduce its effects.

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Topic: Global warming is one of the most serious issues that the world is facing today. What are the causes of global warming and what measures can governments and individuals take to tackle the issue?

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One of the most concerns ("Most" is not used properly. It needs an adjective to form the comparative. e.g. "most interesting", "most threatening", "most intriguing") of humans (Use "humans" in context of animals or other life forms.) at the present time may be global warming. This essay will discuss further the main reasons causing global warming and give some possible solutions.

(It is bad form to mention your essay or to "announce" to the reader what you are going to say. Academic essays have a thesis statement. This is the most vital sentence in the entire essay. It gives the main point that you are going to argue or present.

Also "reasons" do not cause anything.

You need to do a better job of paraphrasing the topic. Here is an example:

The world today is having to deal with many difficult problems: poverty, shortage of clean water, the depletion of natural resources, and the plastic that pollutes our oceans and rivers. Of all of these, the one that threatens the very existence of life as we know it, is climate change. The primary reason is human activities, and because we are the underlying cause, we can do something to stop it.

The underlined sentence is the thesis statement.


The predominant factor resulting in the warming of the earth is carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions which is caused by the major human activities. An obvious example, the burning of fossil fuel to make electronics (Don't you mean electricity? Electronics are items like cell phones and computers.) have generated a large amount of CO2. According to an environmental report in the US in 2000, coal-burning power plants produced (Use present tense) about 2000 billion tons of carbon dioxide every year. In addition, a different huge ("Huge" is not an academic word.) significant amount of CO2 is emitted by industrial zones. Another example of those emissions is the transportation sector. The need for people to commute to work and school rise of human movement demand these days has led to increase the number of vehicles on the streets. Additionally, cheap air travel is attracting more and more people. Consequently, the amount of CO2 has released into the atmosphere. (That needs to be rewritten. e.g. Every year the amount of CO2 released into the atmosphere increases. ) That lead to the temperature of the earth is hotter.

(Not good. As the concentration of CO2 in the atmosphere increases, its greenhouse effect causes the earth to warm.)


There are some solutions to solve these problems (You have been talking about one problem.) or at least reduce the effects. Firstly, First, governments should ban the using energy (Do you mean electricity?) from fossil fuels burning strictly and convert to alter these powers via the environmentally-friendly resources such as wind, tide, and solar. Furthermore, governments need to enforce laws to restrict pollutants emission in manufactories. Secondly, Second, individuals can play a part role in global warming reduction by changing lifestyles. Regarding transport, people should use means of transport which is powered are run out by solar energy or biodiesel and just use only travel when really necessary. Moreover, the using led – LED bulbs, and turning off all electrical devices when going out can help.

In conclusion, although global warming is a serious problem, there are steps that governments and individuals can take to reduce its effects.