Hi ! Everyone:

Can you tell me which version is the best among the three versions(one of them is mine) ?

1

The Most Romantic life
by
Zhao Yonghua

We sit on the carpet, back to back
chatting about our dreams
while enjoying music
you want me to be more gentle,
and I hope to be the apple of your eye

you thank me for leading you into the Garden
and want to fulfill my romantic dream
even if it takes a whole life
you will try to make it if I tell it to you

The most romantic life I can imagine
Is to grow old with you gradually
I will collect all the laughter we share
Taste it in the later of life
In the rocking chair

The most romantic life I can imagine
Is to grow old with you gradually
Till we are too old to travel around
You still treasure me
As the apple of your eye

2

Back to back,
On the carpet.
Enjoy the music, talk about our wishes.
You wish me to be more gentle
I hope you can take me to your heart.

You promise me a romantic dream
to thank me for taking you to the paradise.
that you'll keep every word of mine in your mind.
even If it takes a life time to realize.

The most romantic story I can ever think of
is to grow old with you day by day.
Joys and laughters on the way
can be saved in our memories
for a later chat on our wheelchairs.

The most romantic story I can ever think of
is to grow old with you day by day.
When we're too old and frail to go anywhere,
You will still love me no less than before.

3

the most beautiful wishes
on the carpet we sit back to back
listening to the music we chat about wishes
you want me to be your little sweet lamb
i wish to sit in your heart feeling the beat

you wish me more dreams of fairytales
in return for the paradise you see inside me
please tell me a wish
i'll search till i find it

the most beautiful thing i want from you
is to spend my life with you never to be parted
every bit of our happiness
will be tasted again when we sit side by side

the most beautiful dream i wish to have
is to walk with you never to stop
when we can't walk
i still sit in your heart hearing the beat
Without question, I like #1 best: it is the least contrived. However, there are good bits in all of them; they also all need work.
N2 but I like things in the other 2. How about a mixture of the three?
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The best thing I like is the idea about the growing love and care. The first is the best because it's very organized and interesting, there are some good lines in the other two, though. ' Is to grow old with you gradually,' is just the best sentence ever..Emotion: smile
The second one gets a bit depressing with its talk of wheelchairs and unable to go anywhere...overdoing the 'grow older together' point a bit. I don't find the idea of being bedridden, even with someone I love, a very romantic idea!