Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
People put forward various suggestions on how students should make decisions regarding areas of study at university. While some strongly advocate that students must focus on certain major fields, I believe that everyone should be able to study whatever fits their interests most.
There are various reasons why advocates of the assertion that universities should force students into certain key subject areas. For one aspect, people might think that some fields of study such as medicine, engineering and information technology could develop the specific skills and knowledge they need for future professions. It is an indisputable fact that these courses have the potential to create more job opportunities, career progression, attractive salaries and thus improve a higher life standard for students who take them. From a technological perspective, a major concentration on digital and scientific areas might lead to new inventions, economic growth and more considerable breakthroughs in the future.
In spite of these arguments, I strongly advocate the idea that colleges should allow students to take classes across all academic disciplines. In my opinion, broad education is the key to fully developing an individual’s potential, as opposed to a narrow study, which only focuses on a few areas in life. On top of that, students should have the freedom to choose whatever they feel most motivated, otherwise, they would end up losing interest and give up along the journey to achieving personal academic goals. Besides, no one can give an accurate prediction of what future path they would take, thus, they should be well-equipped by a vast range of knowledge before entering the fierce job market.
From what has been discussed above, although it might seem quite rational for colleges to put a lot of emphasis on some of the core subjects, I still personally commit to the notion that students should be granted the right to pursue a wide range of study.
People put forward various suggestions on how students should make decisions regarding areas of study which major they will study at university. While some strongly advocate that students must focus on certain lucrative major fields, I believe that everyone should be able to study whatever fits their interests most.
There are various reasons why advocates of the assertion that universities should force students into certain key subject areas.
Your first sentence has a big problem . The dependent clause is ungrammatical, and that poisons the entire sentence.
why advocates of the assertion [ that universities should force students into certain key subject areas. ].
The bracketed words are a relative clause modifying "assertion"
If this clause is removed, you can see the problem. The sentence is incomplete and ungrammatical.
There are various reasons why advocates of the assertion.
For From one aspect, people might think that some fields of study such as medicine, engineering and information technology could develop the specific skills and knowledge they need for future professions.
Your second sentence also has a big problem.
You write that "fields of study develop skills" That makes no sense at all.. People develop skills, not fields of study!
It is an indisputable fact that these courses have the potential to create more job opportunities, career progression, attractive salaries and thus improve a higher life standard for students who take them.
Your third sentence repeats the same error as the second sentence.
Courses do not create more job opportunities.
The yellow highlighting is an ungrammatical noun phrase. Compound phrases must include a conjunction.
The last highlighted phrase does not make much sense.
Which of these is good:
If you practice, you will improve a higher score.
If you practice, you will get a higher score.
IF you practice, you will improve your score.
It is an indisputable fact that students who pursue these courses have more job opportunities, a better career progression, and earn higher salaries and thus improve their standard of living.
The fourth sentence also is not very sound.
From a technological perspective, many new graduates with a major in science or engineering concentration on digital and scientific areas might invent new things, leading to lead to new inventions, economic growth and more considerable breakthroughs in the future.
In spite of these arguments, I strongly advocate the idea that (Put your opinion only in the introduction and conclusion. Avoid repeating it in the body paragraphs. It is too repetitious.) colleges should allow students to take classes across all academic disciplines. In my opinion, (repetitious) broad education is the key to fully developing an individual’s potential, as opposed to a narrow study, which only focuses on a few topics. a few areas in life. On top of that, students should have the freedom to choose whatever motivates them. Otherwise they feel most motivated, they would end up losing interest and give up along the journey to achieving personal academic goals. Besides, no one can give an accurate prediction of what future path they would take, (this is the second comma splice error in this paragraph. I corrected the first one - which used the conjunctive adverb "otherwise.") thus, they should be well-equipped by with a vast range of knowledge before entering the fiercely competitive fierce job market.
From what has been discussed above, In conclusion, although it might seem quite rational for universities colleges to put a lot of emphasis on some of the core subjects, I still personally commit to the notion that students should be granted the right to pursue a wide range of study.
(You made some good points in your essay. However, you were a little bit off-topic. The subject was the choice of a major subject, not taking courses willy-nilly from every faculty. Also, you could have improved your essay with a personal example. Do you know someone who chose to major in history and languages, and now is a foreign diplomat? Something to that effect.)
Thank you so much for your kind help! I'll definitely bear in mind all the mistakes you've pointed out.
Actually this is something interesting, how did you get through the interview?
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Michellelouis:
The original was posted about two and a half years ago. I don't think there's going to be a reply.
CJ