Good health has long been considered as a measure to ensure a decent standard of living. Though all ordinary citizen has their own right to gain access to healthcare systems, which is a fundamental part of our human rights, socio-economic background acting as a preclusion to human autonomy of being given adequate medical care, is rife in multitude countries in recent years. From my perspective, it is vital that we should reserve this adverse growth; if not, insurmountable repercussions will inevitably arise.


The first and foremost for my standpoint is the higher mortality and morbidity rates among human beings especially, those in the most vulnerable and fragile position such as. Disadvantage and marginalization serve to ostracize certain populations in societies from enjoying good health, not only will those people be at greater risk from the health problems but also having a plethora of issues arising inextricably linked to the bereft of essential needs of every one’s quotidian life including abode and sustenance. For instance, many poverty-stricken victims are being denuded of being cured and be heaped insults on by paramedics when admitting to hospitals as they cannot foot the bills. These exigent plights should be addressed by implement free-of - charge healthcare programme. that people would recuperate from illness without worries.


Secondly, economic depression is a potential peril of overt or implicit discrimination in the delivery of health services. Whether a nation flourishes or not, it depends on loads of factors, whereas its human resource comes to the fore as an indispensable pillar of national progress. If the discriminatory group’s well-being is blatantly disregarded, such pattern replicated on a mass scale may take a staggering toll on output of labor force. Ergo, country’s desire to ascend to greater heights could be put behind. Take Covid-19 pandemic as an example, if we do not pay heed to a patient already contracting the lethally communicable disease, the case numbers could increase exponentially and trigger consequences inimical to community’s health as a whole. Therefore, a hefty amount of money should be allocated to medical apparatus, vaccination production, treatment and so forth.


In conclusion, for the above-stated rationales, I would affirm that every human being is entitled to the enjoyment of the highest attainable standard of health conducive to living a life in dignity irrespective of their social or economic status. Unfortunately, though, the matter of creating the egalitarian society often receive scant discussion.

Good health has long been considered as a measure to ensure a decent standard of living. Though all ordinary citizens have their own right to gain access to healthcare systems, which is a fundamental part of our human rights, socio-economic background acting as a preclusion to human autonomy of being given adequate medical care, is rife in multitude countries in recent years. From my perspective, it is vital that we should reserve this adverse growth; if not, insurmountable repercussions will inevitably arise.


The first and foremost for my standpoint is the higher mortality and morbidity rates among human beings especially, those in the most vulnerable and fragile position such as. Disadvantage and marginalization serve to ostracize certain populations in societies from enjoying good health, not only will those people be at greater risk from the health problems but also having a plethora of issues arising inextricably linked to the bereft of essential needs of every one’s quotidian life including abode and sustenance. For instance, many poverty-stricken victims are being denuded of being cured and be heaped insults on by paramedics when admitting to hospitals as they cannot foot the bills. These exigent plights should be addressed by implement free-of - charge healthcare programme. that people would recuperate from illness without worries.


Secondly, economic depression is a potential peril of overt or implicit discrimination in the delivery of health services. Whether a nation flourishes or not, it depends on loads of factors, whereas its human resource comes to the fore as an indispensable pillar of national progress. If the discriminatory group’s well-being is blatantly disregarded, such pattern replicated on a mass scale may take a staggering toll on output of labor force. Ergo, country’s desire to ascend to greater heights could be put behind. Take Covid-19 pandemic as an example, if we do not pay heed to a patient already contracting the lethally communicable disease, the case numbers could increase exponentially and trigger consequences inimical to community’s health as a whole. Therefore, a hefty amount of money should be allocated to medical apparatus, vaccination production, treatment and so forth.


In conclusion, for the above-stated rationales, I would affirm that every human being is entitled to the enjoyment of the highest attainable standard of health conducive to living a life in dignity irrespective of their social or economic status. Unfortunately, though, the matter of creating the egalitarian society often receive scant discussion.

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That is why we ask you to put it in the body with your essay and not in the "subject" line.

I found these instructions online, and assume that this is the practice essay you are writing:

Good health is a basic human right. However, in a growing number of countries today, access to health care depends on socio-economic status. This is discriminatory and should not be the basis for access to good health. To what extent do you agree with the statement?

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Good health is a basic human right. However, in a growing number of countries today, access to health care depends on socio-economic status. This is discriminatory and should not be the basis for access to good health. To what extent do you agree with the statement?

Good health has long been considered as a measure to ensure a decent standard of living. (That does not make sense. ) Though all (wrong word) ordinary citizen has their own right to gain access to the healthcare systems, which is a fundamental part of our human rights, socio-economic background acting as a preclusion to human autonomy of being given adequate medical care, is rife in multitude countries in recent years. (That is completely incomprehensible. It is a lot of big words put together with no idea of contextual meaning. ) From my perspective, it is vital that we should reserve this adverse growth; (There is not growth or increase mentioned in the task instructions. Focus directly on the instructions) if not, insurmountable repercussions will inevitably arise.

You did not answer the essay prompt. So you will lose points. But already you have shot yourself in the foot with the misused vocabulary.

The first and foremost (Foremost is an adjective. What is the noun?) for my standpoint is the higher mortality and morbidity rates among human beings especially, those in the most vulnerable and fragile position such as. (That does not make sense. ) Disadvantage (wrong word) and marginalization serve to ostracize certain populations in societies from enjoying good health, (Comma splice error) not only will those people be at greater risk from the health problems but also having a plethora (wrong word) of issues arising inextricably linked to the bereft of essential needs of every one’s (wrong spelling) quotidian life including abode and sustenance. (wrong word) For instance, many poverty-stricken victims are being denuded (wrong word) of being cured and be heaped insults on (wrong grammar) by paramedics when admitting to hospitals as they cannot foot the bills. These exigent plights should be addressed by implement (wrong form) free-of - charge (awkward, unnatural) healthcare programme. that (wrong word) people would recuperate from illness without worries.


I just gave up here. You are trying to impress the examiner with your bodacious memorized word list that you gained by studying a thesaurus, but you have no inkling of how to fit these words together in a comprehensible sentence.

Many students think that if they use high-level and very "sophisticated" vocabulary, they will get a higher band score. This is a false impression. One of the four scoring criteria for Task 2 is "Lexical Resource." A student with a high level of lexical resource not only knows many words, but they know how to use them. Here are the descriptors:

Band score 7:

- uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision
- uses less common lexical items with some awareness of style and collocation
- may produce occasional errors in word choice, spelling and/or word formation

Band score 6:

- uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task
- attempts to use less common vocabulary but with some inaccuracy
- makes some errors in spelling and/or word formation, but they do not impede communication

Your essay will not get a band 6 score for "Lexical Resource". You have a lot of inaccuracy and your writing certainly impedes communication.

It is not enough to know a word from the dictionary; you have to use it correctly and naturally in a sentence. So it is much better to use vocabulary you know well than to make a lot of errors with words you are uncertain about.

Your score will go up if you write with the purpose of clearly communicating your ideas to the reader of your essay, not trying to impress the examiner.

Also, you have a lot of grammatical errors. The score for "Grammatical Range and Accuracy" will suffer, too.

Here is a lesson for you.

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