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First of all, I would like to say thanks god for giving me strength, highly patience and good health during my task to complete this research and in preparing this thesis until it was completely done. The special thanks goes to my helpful Chairman of the Supervisory Committee, Associate Professor Dr. Heng Phai Mu for the continues support and guidance of my master research. She teaches me how to be disciplined, dedicated and committed in working or doing something. She is role model for me.
First of all I would like to thank God for having given me the strength, patience, physical and mental endurance to complete this research and to find resources to prepare the present thesis. I would also like to show my gratitude to the most helpful Chairman of the Supervising Committee, Associate Professor Doctor Heng Phai Mu for the continuous support and guidance during my master research. She taught me how to be disciplined, dedicated and fully committed in all my activities. She will always be a role model for me.
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My grateful thanks also go to both of my member of the Supervising Committee who are Associate Professor Doctor June How and Doctor Richard Willy for their support, advice and important comments that motivated me during my study.

I am also very thankful to my financial support Ministry of Science and Technology for funding me National Science Fellowship (NSF) scholarship.

Finally, I would express my deepest sense of gratitude to my soul who are my mom Lisa and dad Kamal for always being my passion to continue this study as well as my family. Not forgetting to my fellow friends who always guide me when I have lost and for giving me moral support. People who are involved in the process of/during my study, a great appreciations I wish to you.
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My deepest thanks also to the members of the S.C, especially to Associate Professor Doctor June How and Doctor Richard Willy for their support, advice and for the important feedback which highly motivated me during studying.

I`m also grateful to the Ministry of Science and Technology for the financial support they provided me by the National Science Fellowship scholarship.

Finally I would like to express my everlasting love and appreciation to my soul mates - my dearest parents Lisa and Kamal - and also to my entire family who have always supported my endeavor to continue my studies. Special thanks also to my good friends who have always been there for me in all difficult circumstances.

To all people involved in the process or during my studies, a warm "thank you!" to you all.

Last, but not least, I want to thank EnglishForward for proofreading my speech !

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What does S.C. in second paragraph means? Is it supervising or supervisory committee?

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I would also like to show my gratitude to the most helpful Chairman of the Supervising Committee, Associate Professor Doctor Heng Phai Mu for the continues support, guidance, meticulous suggestions and astute criticism during my master research.

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Supervising Committee. ( I have already mentioned that fully in the previous post Emotion: smile)

Secondly, I have added some words in the first paragraph. Is it correct?
I would also like to show my gratitude to the most helpful Chairman of the Supervising Committee, Associate Professor Doctor Heng Phai Mu for the continuous support, guidance, meticulous suggestions and astute criticism during my master research.

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Englishmann, could you please check this biodata? Thanks a lot..I really appreciate your contribution and ideas.Emotion: idea

5th May 1986 is a historic date for Lili Way. On that day she was born in Tebrau. She had her early education at Primary School Petaling I and continued it at Secondary School Petaling II and after form three, she registered at Secondary School Begawan in Tebrau.

After end school days, she furthered her education at Tebrau Matriculation College in life science course for one year. Then, she got an offer to further her study at University of Egypt sponsored by Nasional Science Fellowship and graduated in 2009 with Bachelor of Science with Honours in Chemistry. Currently, she enrolled in her final semester of the Organic Chemistry program at University of Egypt as well.