Kofi Annan, one of four children and a twin, was born into an aristocratic family in Kumasi, Ghana on April 8, 1938.

Kofi Annan received his early education at a premiere boarding school in the Gold Coast (now known as Ghana). He was highly educated as he won a scholarship to study economics at Macalester College in Saint Paul in Minnesota and then he went to Geneva in Switzerland for further studies. He also obtained his management degree from MIT (the Massachusetts Institute of Technology).He was fluent in English, French and several African languages.

He served as Secretary General of the United Nations from 1997 to 2006. He and the United Nations were jointly awarded the Nobel Peace Prize in 2001 for their work for a better organized and more peaceful world. He is well known for his role in fighting poverty, injustice and disease. He was recognised for his fight against HIV/AIDS, for his support for human rights, his opposition to international terrorism and for other humanitarian work.

Annan died on August 18, 2018 in Switzerland at the age of 80.

He is inspirational because he changed and improved the world through his work and optimistic attitude. His story teaches us that we can overcome any challenges if we all work together and we all have a role to play in our fight against poverty, injustice and other pressing global issues such as climate change, terrorism etc.

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