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Hi, I'm writing a short msg to my little cousin. Please help to correct my grammar and make it sounds natural and smooth.

"Do you remember the time we shared this summer? Ya, the time we played with the dog at our house? The tasty strawberry ice-cream...? Of course, we miss you so much! We tresure most of every time we can get together since you long live in New York. You promise to come again in the winter time. So, grandpa, grandma and all of us are waiting here to seeing you soon.

Study hard and always be a good big brother of taking good care of your little sister Jenny, and a great son to your mom and dad."

Many thanks!!!
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Do you remember the time we shared this summer? The time we played with the dog at our house? The tasty strawberry ice cream? Of course, we miss you so much! We treasure every time we can get together, since you live so far away in New York. Please promise to come again in the winter. Grandpa, grandma and all of us are hoping to see you again soon.

Study hard. Always be a good big brother by taking good care of your little sister Jenny and be a great son to your mom and dad.
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We tresure most of every time we can get together since you long live in New York.It is better to change them into "we treasure most of the time we get together since you have a long stay in New York ".
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