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Hello, I would need someone to go over my correction, the part in bold, i'm correcting this for a student, i've just gotten my tofel exam and working to be a teacher, if someone could look at this, i wouldn't want to give it back with the wrong correction

  • The first light turned green at the same time as the other turned red
The first light turned green at the same time as the other BOTH but different meaning

  • I'm a person that, if had the opertunity to accelerate and drive fast, would all the time NO that if given the opportunity to go fast , would all the time

  • I have a hard time driving on /around roundabout, i tend to slow down way too much BOTH

  • I got flashed by a speed radar on my way to work I don't know

  • Look up and witness your losing a grand on this bet OK but that's the gerund you can also say "and witness you losing a grand..."

  • Each person pays for his or her drink OK

  • There is a crack in the bowling ball/there is a chuck of the bowling ball missing/that cracked off OK for all I think

  • I've been hitting nice shots today, at least more than usual OK or more than the usual

  • How any more points do you get when you hit a strike than a spare? OK

  • Do you have good aim when shooting OK don't forget question mark

  • There is more pressure involved when you're playing for money OK or There is no pressure when...

  • The helmet is on too loose/is too loose BOTH

  • What the closest supermarket apart from/except for ralphs I don't know

  • When I like sometihng, i tend to only buy that one thing and not try anything else OK

  • This market is as close to my house as the other one down the road OK

  • Look what you look like when you're drunk/how you look when you're drunk BOTH

  • Take the turn wide or you'll crash NO Take the turn widely

  • The bottom teeth are way back in relation to the upper/compared to the upper BOTH

  • 10 thousand dolars is nothing in reltion to his net worth/compared to his networth BOTH

  • That tip isn't big in relation to usual/compared to usual /in relation to usual FIRST 2 and IN RELATION TO THE USUAL

  • There will no longer be bubbles if you leave the cap off the coke bottle I don't know if you can say bubbles

  • Thats too long journey to do twice NO That's too long A journey to do twice

  • When i think of france , i think of its cheese OK

  • How long is left of the movie I don't know but i would say "how many minutes are left?"

  • I'll care for your son as if it were my own OK or I'll take care of him as if he were my own

  • Push the time of the meeting back an hour OK

  • Her hands were full of blood when she walked in the door OK

  • There is a lot of girls i find prettier than her NO There are a lot of girls ...

  • That's my idea of a girl NO That's my ideal girl

  • Any computer that lasts more than a year after i've used it is a good computer OK

  • Why play the slots, leaving you're fate to a machine is stupid OK or Leaving destiny to a machine

  • she left a note on the fridge to not forget to water the plants OK i think or She left a note so that she wouldn't forget ...

  • We'll go 50 50 on the traffic ticket OK colloquial or We'll split it

  • You can't really get lucky in bowling NO AT BOWLING

  • Hold it in your hands OK

  • This car doesn't use up a lot of gas OK

  • The house is open to everyone now OK

  • Im coming around to the whole asian thing, i'm starting to like their women OK or coming around to their women

  • The richer you are the cheaper you are OK or the richer you get the cheaper you get

  • What hotplate is that switch connected to? OK

  • Keep the other team below 30 points OK
thank you

alc
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Hi,

The reason you have not yet had a reply maybe that your post is very long.

I'm glad that you have now started sentences with a capirtal. But oyu still have other problems with capitals and punctuation in some of these examples.

Now that I know you will be a teacher, let me ask you this.

Are you going to teach your students the importance of these matters? If you don't, then they will get a big shock if they go to an English university or get a job with an English employer. They will think that you did not do a good job of teaching them, and I'm sure you don't want that.

All OK except for my edits in pink.

Best wishes, Clive

The first light turned green at the same time as the other turned red

The first light turned green at the same time as the other BOTH but different meaning

  • I'm a person that, if had the opertunity to accelerate and drive fast, would all the time NO that, if given the opportunity to go fast , would do so all the time
  • I have a hard time driving on /around a roundabout . I tend to slow down way too much BOTH
  • I got flashed by a speed radar on my way to work I don't know
  • I got caught in a radar trap. . .
  • Look up and witness your losing a grand on this bet OK but that's the gerund you can also say "and witness yourself losing a grand..."
  • Each person pays for his or her drink OK
  • There is a crack in the bowling ball/there is a chuck of the bowling ball missing/that cracked off OK for all I think
  • a crack is not the same as a chunk
  • I've been hitting nice shots today, at least more than usual OK or more than the usual
  • How any more points do you get when you hit a strike than a spare? OK
  • Do you have good aim when shooting OK don't forget question mark
  • There is more pressure involved when you're playing for money OK or There is no pressure when...
  • The helmet is on too loose/is too loose BOTH
  • What the closest supermarket apart from/except for Ralph's I don't know
  • When I like sometihng, i tend to only buy that one thing and not try anything else OK
  • This market is as close to my house as the other one down the road OK
  • Look what you look like when you're drunk/how you look when you're drunk BOTH
  • Take the turn wide or you'll crash NO Take the turn widely we normally say 'wide'.
  • The bottom teeth are way back in relation to the upper/compared to the upper BOTH
  • 10 thousand dolars is nothing in reltion to his net worth/compared to his networth BOTH
  • That tip isn't big in relation to usual/compared to usual /in relation to usual FIRST 2 and IN RELATION TO THE USUAL
  • No. Say That tip isn't bigger than usual.
  • There will no longer be bubbles if you leave the cap off the Coke bottle I don't know if you can say bubbles
  • Thats too long journey to do twice NO That's too long A journey to do twice
  • When i think of france , i think of its cheese OK Wrong. Three capitals are missing.
  • How long is left of the movie we do say this, although it sounds awkward. I suggest 'How long is it to the end of this movie? I don't know but i would say "how many minutes are left?"
  • I'll care for your son as if he it were my own OK or I'll take care of him as if he were my own
  • Push the time of the meeting back an hour OK
  • Her hands were covered in full of blood when she walked in the door OK
  • There is a lot of girls i find prettier than her NO There are a lot of girls ...
  • That's my idea of a girl <<<< OK NO That's my ideal girl OK but different meaning
  • Any computer that lasts more than a year after i've used it is a good computer OK No, capital missing
  • Why play the slots? Leaving you're your fate to a machine is stupid OK or Leaving destiny to a machine
  • She left a note on the fridge to not forget to water the plants OK i think or She left a note so that she wouldn't forget ...
  • We'll go 50 50 on the traffic ticket OK colloquial or We'll split it
  • You can't really get lucky in bowling NO AT BOWLING both
  • Hold it in your hands OK
  • This car doesn't use up a lot of gas OK
  • The house is open to everyone now OK
  • Im coming around to the whole asian thing, i'm starting to like their women OK or coming around to their women No. needs capitals and punctuation
  • The richer you are, the cheaper you are OK or the richer you get the cheaper you get
  • What hotplate is that switch connected to? OK
  • Keep the other team below 30 points OK


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just to clear things up

  • I've been hitting nice shots today, at least more than usual (is it THAN THE USUAL or THAN USUAL?

  • How many more points do you get when you hit a strike than a spare? THIS ONE I WASNT SURE, DOES IT SOUND RIGHT

  • There is more pressure involved when you're playing for money OK or There is no pressure when... (involved is optional????)

  • There will no longer be bubbles if you leave the cap off the Coke bottle I don't know if you can say bubbles (its bubbles that ones says???)

  • How long is left of the movie we do say this, although it sounds awkward. I suggest 'How long is it to the end of this movie? I don't know but i would say "how many minutes are left?"<<<<<can you say that


  • Why play the slots? Leaving you're your fate to a machine is stupid OK or Leaving destiny to a machine <<<< what about DESTINY?

  • She left a note on the fridge to not forget to water the plants OK i think or She left a note so that she wouldn't forget ... can you say both TO NOT FORGET and SO SHE WOULDN'T FORGET WHICH IS BETTER


  • Im coming around to the whole Asian thing, I'm starting to like their women OK or coming around to their women No. needs capitals and punctuation IS THAT BETTER??


thank you
Hi,

just to clear things up

  • I've been hitting nice shots today, at least more than usual (is it THAN THE USUAL or THAN USUAL?
  • How many more points do you get when you hit a strike than a spare? THIS ONE I WASNT SURE, DOES IT SOUND RIGHT It sounds acceptable
  • There is more pressure involved when you're playing for money OK or There is no pressure when... (involved is optional?? yes )
  • There will no longer be bubbles if you leave the cap off the Coke bottle I don't know if you can say bubbles (its bubbles that ones says???) No. I'd say 'fizz'.
  • How long is left of the movie we do say this, although it sounds awkward. I suggest 'How long is it to the end of this movie? I don't know but i would say "how many minutes are left?"<<<<<can you say that Yes, but I'd only say it if I thought we were pretty near the end of the movie.


    • Why play the slots? Leaving you're your fate to a machine is stupid OK or Leaving destiny to a machine <<<< what about DESTINY? Both destiny and fate are OK, but they are quite high-register words. Talkings about the slots is not a very high-register kind of thing to do.
    • She left a note on the fridge to not forget to water the plants OK i think or She left a note so that she wouldn't forget ... can you say both TO NOT FORGET and SO SHE WOULDN'T FORGET WHICH IS BETTER I'd teach the latter first.

    • Im coming around to the whole Asian thing, I'm starting to like their women OK or coming around to their women No. needs capitals and punctuation IS THAT BETTER??

    • No. You need to fix Im. And you have a run-on sentence, ie the comma needs to be a period. That's a serious error. As is the missing period at the end of all your sentences.

    • Clive
thank you

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  • I've been hitting nice shots today, at least more than usual (is it THAN THE USUAL or THAN USUAL?


  • and

    She left a note on the fridge to not forget to water the plants (i know SO THAT is better but is this not acceptable? or is it?)

    thank you Clive
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    Hi,

    I've been hitting nice shots today, at least more than usual (is it THAN THE USUAL or THAN USUAL? 'than usual' is what is commonly said.

    and

    She left a note on the fridge to not forget to water the plants (i know SO THAT is better but is this not acceptable? or is it?) Yes, it is. But being a teacher involves making decisions about what to teach first, what to teach later, and even what not to teach at all (eg in a beginner class, there are many things you wouldn't teach.)

    In my experience, students are usually very ready to accept the teacher's judgement when he says things like 'This is something you can learn later, when your English is a lot better'.

    You are the authority. That's a big responsibility. That's why I'm nagging you to punctuate correctly, etc. They will look at your English as a model.

    Clive