Hello teachers!
I'm writing for my final course essay.
Below is about the film" World Trade Center" and analysis of it.
Please check the grammar mistakes.
Appreciate your help.


The film is based on a true story. Two of Port Authority police officers, John McLoughlin and Will Jimeno were crushed under the collapsed World Trade Center building while rescuing citizens. It demonstrates that how this terror made everything desolated. Also it shows, two police officers who never gave up in the hopeless and fateful time were pulled out alive in the rubbles of the building. People praised them as heros. Only twenty people were pulled out alive and Will and John were numbers 18 and 19.

Two wives of those officers were shown that they were under extreme tension when they got to know that their husbands had gone into the building. They are not merely themselves but also representing all of the New York citizens and the world. There is no other word to describe those citizens but 'a Chaos'.

In the real world, the aftermath of the deadly disaster was huge. Right after the 9/11, 44% of Americans underwent trauma. The trauma accompanied with insomnia caused by both uneasiness and anger. Some New York citizens suffered from hallucinations such as flashbacks. Other were unable to express themselves. In that aspect some amount of 9/11 Victim Fund were used to treat traumatized patients.
Ellisa The film is based on a true story. Two of Port Authority police officers, John McLoughlin and Will Jimeno , were crushed under the collapsed collapsing (depends on whether you view "crushed" as an adjective or a verbal) World Trade Center building while rescuing citizens. It demonstrates that how this act of terror made everything desolated. / desolate. (verbal vs. adjective - your choice) The film also shows Also it shows, two police officers who never gave up in the that hopeless and fateful time. They were pulled out alive in from the rubbles rubble of the building. People praised them as heroes. heros. Only twenty people were pulled out alive , and Will and John were numbers 18 and 19.
Two wives of those officers were shown that they were under extreme tension when they got to know that their husbands had gone into the building. They are not merely themselves but also representing all of the New York citizens and the world. There is no other word way to describe those citizens but 'a in Chaos'.

In the real rest of the world, the aftermath of the deadly disaster was huge. Right after the 9/11 event (OR Right after 9/11), 44% of Americans underwent trauma. The trauma was accompanied with by insomnia , caused by both uneasiness and anger. Some New York citizens suffered from hallucinations such as flashbacks. Other Others were unable to express themselves. In that aspect / regard some amount of The 9/11 Victim Fund were was used to treat traumatized patients.
Thank you for your help!

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In the real world-
I refer "the real life" out of the movie, then can I remain it as what I wrote?
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yes, you can.
Ellisa I refer "the real life" out of the movie, then can I remain it as what I wrote?
Sure! Sorry, I had forgotten at that point that you were talking about a movie.

Re: can I remain it as what I wrote?

Can it remain as what I wrote? Can it remain the way I wrote it? Can I leave it as what I wrote? Can I keep it the way I wrote it? Etc.

By "the real life," I refer to life outside of the movies. (just a suggestion)
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