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Hello everyone!

I will like to improve my writing skill

From now on, I will use English to write something every day to practice it!

Let's start will the dream that I had from yesterday.

In my dream, I am a student and I have a partner. In this world, everyone has a magical weapon.

In the dream, I use a potion to help my partner to upgrade his weapon. It changes from a square sponge to a pair of chock stick with red "N" and blue "S". However, he seems like does not like it too much. As I saw him brought a new but old version of the weapon. Yet, I was curious if I use the potion to upgrade his weapon would it still turn into chock stick or something new. It turns out, chock stick is an upgrade version of square sponge. I ask my friend to help me make a potion to undo the upgrade. When the potion was done, the bell rings, it means time to go back for class. Nevertheless, I was cannot wait to test the effect of the potion until the class end. So I pour a bit on the weapon. People next to me was attracted by action and she asks what am I doing. I tell her what happen and she asked me to help her upgrade her weapon. Even though you are whispering, the teacher still can notice there someone is talking in the class. She asks us to stay quiet otherwise, there would be punishment. There was a boy, he questions the teacher if he does not what would she do? She starts to make the sound of A. Each time the sound and pitch was an increase every time. Until the bear outside of the window, close their eye and hold their ears.


please give me advice on my grammar and sentence structure.


Thank you for your time.

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ahli98I will like to improve my writing skills.

For long texts, it is best to post in the paragraph and essay forum.

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ahli98Let's start will with the dream that I had from yesterday.

It may be better to write about factual things rather than the dream world. A teacher is much more likely to give help.

Practice writing essays, for example. It will not only improve your practical vocabulary, it will be excellent practice should you decide to take university-level classes.

ahli98Please give me advice on my grammar and sentence structure.

I have highlighted the ungrammatical text. You need to work on how to write sentences with dependent clauses. Also, you have mixed up present and past tense. The story is inconsistent.


In the dream, I use a potion to help my partner to upgrade his weapon. It changes from a square sponge to a pair of chock stick with a red "N" and blue "S". However, he seems like does not like it too much. (ungrammatical) As I saw him brought a new but old (??) version of the weapon. (fragment) Yet, I was curious if I use the potion to upgrade his weapon would it still turn into chock stick or something new. (ungrammatical) As it turns out, chock stick is an upgrade advanced version of square sponge. I ask my friend to help me make a potion to undo the upgrade. When the potion was done, the bell rings, it means time to go back for class. (ungrammatical) Nevertheless, I was cannot (ungrammatical) wait to test the effect of the potion until the class end. So I pour a bit on the weapon. People next to me was attracted by action and she asks what am I doing. I tell her what happen and she asked me to help her upgrade her weapon. Even though you are whispering, the teacher still can notice there someone is talking in the class. She asks us to stay quiet otherwise, there would be punishment. There was a boy, he questions the teacher if he does not what would she do? She starts to make the sound of A. Each time the sound and pitch was an increase every time. Until the bear outside of the window, close their eye and hold their ears.