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Please check the my sentences for grammar and puntuation errors. And suggest me to improve its unity and clear meaning.

1.The soft evening rays, landing on my English assignment empty page over my clean writing desk beside the opened window at right; pouring the white sheet with its pale yellow and orange shade seemed like gold.

2. Today, in these natural colors, coming through the opened window, adjusted over the high blue wall; I feel much relaxed -- light as fur, dark clould of stress seems to be fading away.
3.An egg shaped wooden silver-brown frame hanged by a thick brown thread over the nail, waged at upper right wall, quietly posturing the childhood golden days.

These are too long sentences?

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A comment on sentence #1.

Sentences this long needn't be a problem, but here there are so many adjectives and impressions piling on top of one another that it all becomes a bit too much (for me, anyway). There are also problems with grammar and punctuation, but rather than try to correct these in situ it might be better to have a rethink about the overall structure and what you really need to say. The following is, to me, about the maximum information load that can be supported in the one sentence. Even this cut-down version arguably still suffers slightly from adjectivitis ("soft ... open ... empty"):

1. As I sat at my writing desk, the soft evening rays poured through the open window and landed on the empty page of my English assignment, dappling the white sheet in yellow and orange shades.
Thanks Mr Wordy!
I want to know, with lots of these modifying adjectives, my descriptive sentence seemed stronger or cluttered?
as i have seen descriptive sentences or paragraph writers use so many details and adjectives.
and plz point out my puntuation mistakes.

would u plz help me on rest of two sentences as well/
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To me it seems cluttered rather than stronger. Obviously with these style questions there isn't a "right" or "wrong" answer, and different people will have different ideas and preferences. Having said that, I'd be surprised if many native English speakers thought that your original sentence read well (even with the minimum corrections). A lot depends on the way that the sentence is constructed and the type of information that it contains -- not just on the numerical adjective count. Some writers might be able to pack a lot of adjectives into a single sentence and still achieve a good result.

The minimum changes that I would make to correct the punctuation and grammar in your original sentence are:

1. The soft evening rays, landing on my the empty English assignment empty page over on my clean writing desk beside the opened open window at right, pouring covering the white sheet with its their pale yellow and orange shades, seemed like gold.

But stylistically this is, as I say, far from elegant. In particular, the middle clause ("landing ... at right") runs on interminably.

Sentence #2 does not suffer quite so much from adjective overload and clauses that run on and on. The minimum changes I would make are:

2. Today, in these natural colors coming through the opened open window, adjusted ?? over the high blue wall, I feel much relaxed -- light as fur, the dark clould cloud of stress seems to be seemingly fading away.

"Adjusted" is not right here, but I don't really understand what you are trying to say. With a few more slight tweaks this sentence could be OK I think.

3. An egg-shaped wooden silver-brown frame hanged hung by a thick brown thread over the a nail, waged at upper right wall ??, quietly posturing ?? the childhood golden days.

Too many adjectives. I also don't understand what you mean by "waged" and "posturing". Those words don't fit here.
Thanks Mr. Wordy!

Well what should I do to make my sentence elegant? Should I use clauses or direct meaning without using phrases?

Tell me the first sentence if I rephrase like this without heavily use of adjectives.

Sitting at my writing desk placed right-hand side of open window, and working on my English assignment, resulted in adventurous and fascinated experience in such evening soft sunrays.
Or should I start with pronoun "I" and restructure again

Second one add some more adjectives:
Today, in these natural colors, stepping inn through my hazel gray opened window, over the blue wall, I feel much relaxed -- light as fur, the dark clouds of stress and fatigue seemingly fading away.

Mr wordy why we write "seemingly" instead of "seems to be" ?

And can 2 ajectives modify one noun ?
like his sweet soft smile?
Hello again Mr. Wordy Emotion: smile

1. Why it’s not good using "Gently landing" I mean gently is adverb of verb landing?

2. Glow is singular, so we use "it's" to balance subject-verb agreement, is it correct?

Sorry but i have a question about my previous, 2nd sentence, we discussed earlier.

Today, in these natural colors, coming through the opened window, adjusted over the high blue wall; I feel much relaxed -- light as fur, dark cloud of stress seems to be fading away.

[Suggested sentence]

Today, in these natural colors coming through the open window, over the high blue wall, I feel much relaxed -- light as fur, the dark cloud of stress seemingly fading away.

What if I add a noun and write like this my original sentences with some more changes:-

Today, in these pleasant evening rays, different colors stepping [ or streaming would be good?] inn through my brown [adding different adjective] window, [situated word is ok?] over the tall blue, right-hand side wall, [same] I feel much relaxed -- light as fur, the dark cloud of stress and fatigue seemingly fading away.
I'm adding more adjectives to “window”, as I want to describe a little about where it is located, color etc.
Is this sentences seems ok? Or feel congested?

And I would like to ask, what if the last line [the dark cloud of stress and fatigue seemingly fading away]
I separate it from rest of the sentence. Would it be fine in case of coherence where each sentence should agree with previous?
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1. Why it’s not good using "Gently landing" I mean gently is adverb of verb landing?

There is no problem with "gently landing" itself. As you rightly say, "gently" is an adverb qualifying "landing". The issue is whether, in the sentence you wrote, the verb "landing" fits the noun "glow". It's not wrong, but to me it sounded slightly odd.

2. Glow is singular, so we use "it's" to balance subject-verb agreement, is it correct?

Almost. It should be "its", not "it's". (It's actually noun-determiner agreement rather than subject-verb agreement.)

Today, in these pleasant evening rays, different colors stepping [ or streaming would be good?] inn through my brown [adding different adjective] window, [situated word is ok?] over the tall blue, right-hand side wall, [same] I feel much relaxed -- light as fur, the dark cloud of stress and fatigue seemingly fading away.

"tall blue, right-hand side wall" is, to me, slightly too much. "right-hand side wall" isn't really grammatical, and again I question whether it helps the sentence to mention that it's "right-hand". If you really do want to include this kind of detail then I wonder if you would do better with two sentences -- perhaps one sentence to explain the layout of the room, window and wall, and another to describe the sun's rays and the feelings that they evoked.

As I mentioned before, "stepping" is the wrong word; "streaming" is fine. "Inn" should be "in". I don't understand what you mean by "situated word is ok?".


And I would like to ask, what if the last line [the dark cloud of stress and fatigue seemingly fading away]
I separate it from rest of the sentence. Would it be fine in case of coherence where each sentence should agree with previous?

I think I answered that one before. I said: "But if you were starting a new sentence then 'seem to be' would be correct: I feel much relaxed -- light as fur. The dark clouds of stress and fatigue seem to be fading away."
You meant like this: Is this ok ?

My tall Off-white in color, right wall gracefully hold the blue , wide window [seems complete ?]. Today, In these pleasent evening colors streaming in through this open window, I feel much relaxed --light as fur, the dark clouds of stress and fatigue seemingly fading away.

Or i should say this way:

At the right-hand side, there is a tall off-white wall, with blue, wide window.

Or, should i add metaphors or more descriptive words ?
My tall Off-white in color, right wall gracefully hold the blue , wide window [seems complete ?]. Today, In these pleasent evening colors streaming in through this open window, I feel much relaxed --light as fur, the dark clouds of stress and fatigue seemingly fading away.

There are a number of problems here. "off-white in color" can't go before a noun. You can say "my wall is off-white in color" or "my off-white wall...", but not "my off-white in color wall". Similarly with "right". You can say "my wall is on/at/to the right", but not "my right wall".

To agree with "wall", "hold" should be "holds", but "hold" is the wrong verb. It is not totally impossible that a wall could "hold" a window, but it doesn't sound good here.

"My wall" is certainly not wrong, but when introducing a scene I would be inclined to say "a wall". It's hard to explain why. The best I can do is to say that "my" sounds a bit "childish". That isn't quite what I mean, but it's the closest I can get. On the other hand, "my chair" is fine. The difference is that a chair is something more personal and intimate to you.

Structurally, the first sentence doesn't connect with the second as well as it might.

"Off-white" should be "off-white", there is an unnecessary space after "blue", "In" should be "in", "pleasent" should be "pleasant", and there is a space missing after "--". Everyone makes typos occasionally; it's easy enough to do. But it's a good idea to check carefully for these sorts of "obvious" mistakes.

There are innumerable ways to rewrite this to make it better. In the following attempt, I have added "In the evenings, I... " in order to tie in the description of the window and the wall with what follows.

In the evenings, I often sit in my study, next to a wide blue window that looks out over a tall white wall. Today, as the evening colors stream in through the open window, I feel much relaxed -- light as fur, the dark clouds of stress and fatigue seemingly fading away.
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