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"How important is an open heart" you say
(open heart- to be opened about things, but I want it to be a methphor)

but your heart to another (person) you will not expose. (can I write to another, without "person"?)

light is now as severe - please let me know if that is correct

becoming tired, struggling - for this sentence if it's about "you" should I add "you are becoming tired"? or "becoming tired" it correct?

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Grammar

I do not understand your questions because you have not written complete sentences.

anonymousbut I want it to be a metaphor

He has an open heart. This is a very common metaphor.
If it were literal, it would be "He's having open heart surgery."

anonymousbut your heart to another (person) you will not expose. (can I write to another, without "person"?)

That makes no sense. Is this what you mean?

A person with an open heart exposes themselves to others' unkind words.
anonymouslight is now as severe - please let me know if that is correct

I don't understand that. Please write the entire sentence.

anonymousbecoming tired, struggling - for this sentence if it's about "you" should I add "you are becoming tired"? or "becoming tired" it correct?

Those are valid verb phrases, but I don't know if you are using them correctly.

e.g.

It's plain to see that you are becoming tired of me. Let's break our engagement. You need to find an exciting, stimulating relationship with someone else.

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Grammar

I do not understand your questions because you have not written complete sentences.

anonymousbut I want it to be a metaphor

He has an open heart. This is a very common metaphor.
If it were literal, it would be "He's having open heart surgery."

anonymousbut your heart to another (person) you will not expose. (can I write to another, without "person"?)

That makes no sense. Is this what you mean?

A person with an open heart exposes themselves to others' unkind words.
anonymouslight is now as severe - please let me know if that is correct

I don't understand that. Please write the entire sentence.

anonymousbecoming tired, struggling - for this sentence if it's about "you" should I add "you are becoming tired"? or "becoming tired" it correct?

Those are valid verb phrases, but I don't know if you are using them correctly.

e.g.

It's plain to see that you are becoming tired of me. Let's break our engagement. You need to find an exciting, stimulating relationship with someone else.

Hi thank you I add the full text:

How will you sell them joy,
when you are one of the saddest men in town
"How important is an open heart"
you say
but your heart to another you will not expose

light is now as severe
becoming tired, struggling
your teachings are clear and orderly

anonymousHow will you sell them joy,

I assume this is a poem.

Poets generally have a lot of license to violate rules of grammar, but there is a limit.
After the fourth line, it does not make sense.