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Do you think the following sentences are correct?

We are fully aware of the current situation with the bin room; however, this is beyond our control.

We have been in communication with the council in the past weeks to get them to collect the bins, but unfortunately, we seem to be getting nowhere.

Tower Hamlets Council has informed us that their main contractor had an industrial strike, which they have only just come to an agreement.

Nevertheless, Tower Hamlet Council has promised us that all sites, including Dod Street bins will be collected this Wednesday.

If you have any questions or concerns, please contact Tower Hamlets Council directly.

We thank you for your continued patience.

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Grammar

Do you think the following sentences are correct? Here are some edits. Please ask if you have any queries about them.

We are fully aware of the current situation with the bin room. However, this is beyond our control.

We have been in communication with the council in the past weeks to get them to collect the bins, but unfortunately no comma we seem to be getting nowhere.

Tower Hamlets Council has informed us that their main contractor had an industrial strike, which has only just ended in an agreement.

Nevertheless, Tower Hamlet Council has promised us that all sites, including the Dod Street bins, will be collected this Wednesday.

If you have any questions or concerns, please contact Tower Hamlets Council directly.

We thank you for your continued patience.

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Here's why I made those edits.

We are fully aware of the current situation with the bin room. However, this is beyond our control.

I find a semi-colon too fancy and fussy for a mundane notice about garbage. In addition, the conjunction 'however' provides enough linkage to what has been said previously. if you feel you must use a semi-colon, I'd write it as We are fully aware of the current situation with the bin room; this is beyond our control.

We have been in communication with the council in the past weeks to get them to collect the bins, but unfortunately no comma we seem to be getting nowhere. There's no apparent reason to use a comma there.

Tower Hamlets Council has informed us that their main contractor had an industrial strike, which has only just ended in an agreement. Without my change, it sounds like the strike may ahve been far in the past.

Nevertheless, Tower Hamlet Council has promised us that all sites, including the Dod Street bins, will be collected this Wednesday.

You can say all sites, including Dod Street. but you can't say all sites, including Dod Street bins

If you have any questions or concerns, please contact Tower Hamlets Council directly.

We thank you for your continued patience.

Clive

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Why have you made such changes?

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Understood!