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Some people think that the school performance of students and their emotional maturation are affected by their classmates more than their teachers. I firmly agree with that opinion, peers have more of an impact than teachers do.


First, the school performance of students can be developed in a competitive environment with their peers. The desire to be outstanding in class makes them practice hard and stimulates their motivations to study and improve. For instance, I was very bad at English, when I attended an English class 3 three years ago and saw my peers get a high score in the test, during I just got 4 points. At moment, I had the feeling of peer pressure. And the pressure became my motivation, I started trying more, doing more exercises, and enhancing my English skill. This demonstrates that competition among peers plays an important role in enhancing students' academic results.


Second, peers have affected students through socializing. On the daily basis, among friends, we usually share things, storíe, ideas, etc than with teachers. This can help the student develop their emotional maturation and easily learn how to control the emotion. For example, when I have some problems in my life, my friends will be the first who I share about this and ask for advice. And the time I interact with my peers is always more than with my teachers. And, building relationships by spending time playing and talking with classmates is beneficial to children's emotional growth.


In conclusion, peers play an important role in improving their academic achievement as well as growing their emotional feelings.



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Some people think that the school performance of students and their emotional maturation are affected by their classmates more than their teachers. I firmly completely / totally / fully / wholeheartedly (These are adverbs of extent) agree with that opinion, (comma splice error, ungrammatical sentence https://chompchomp.com/terms/commasplice.htm) peers have more of an impact than teachers do.


First, the school the students' performance in the classroom of students (Try to avoid repeating the same phrase - My changes have rephrased the same thing.) can be developed in a competitive environment with their peers. The desire to be outstanding in class makes them practice hard and stimulates their motivations to study and improve. For instance, I was very bad at English, when I attended an English class 3 three years ago and saw my peers get a high score in the test, while / whereas during I just got 4 points. At that moment, I had the feeling of peer pressure. And the pressure that / it became my motivation, (comma splice error) I started trying more, doing more exercises, and enhancing (This verb is misused a lot. English speakers rarely use it and usually in certain contexts, but I see it quite often in essays.) honing / improving / bettering my English skills. This demonstrates that competition among peers plays an important role in enhancing driving students' academic results to be higher.


Second, peers have affected affect each other students through socializing. On the daily basis, among friends, we usually share things, storíe, ideas, etc (Do not use "..." or "etc." or phrases such as "and so on" in academic writing. It demonstrates incomplete ideas or thoughts.) that we never tell our than with teachers. This can help us the student (Do not mix first person and third person in one idea development.) develop our their emotional maturity maturation and easily learn how to control our frustrations, disappointments, or anger. the emotion. For example, when I have some problems in my life, my friends will be the first who I confide in share about this and ask for advice. And the time I interact with my peers is always more than with my teachers. And, (repetitive) Moreover / In addition / Besides / Furthermore / building relationships by spending time playing and talking with classmates is beneficial to children's emotional growth.


In conclusion, peers play an important role in improving their each others academic achievement as well as assisting in their maturation to adulthood. growing their emotional feelings.