I cannot understand what it need me to answer, hope someone can give me some suggestions and whether my answer fits the question. thanks

Why have you chosen to apply for this particular vacancy at *****? Please answer by demonstrating your knowledge of the Service Line, role and associated qualification.*(75)

***** is the world’s largest professional services organization, which helps its clients build value, manage risk and improve performance. As a part of *****, the *****(department) specialized in helping clients’ systems are operation effectively through its deep understanding of regulation and legislation and extensive industry knowledge. I want to join it, not only because it gives me an opportunity to work with talent people, but also because the training programme contains study towards professional qualification which will give me an excellent grounding.

Tell us what steps you have taken to clarify your career choice by providing detailed evidence of the research you have undertaken.*(75)

My first image of ****** was from the press that reported ******(company name) was almost twice the size of its nearest competitor. It must be the largest ******firm and I felt very interested in it and did some research it: through talking with a friend who works in ******(department) in ******(company), I found the job is a tough but full with surprising; after joined the presentation, I knew this job is my desired.

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You can tell more about the second question they ask you how you found this job,how you researched it and what you did.

First question wants you to explain why you came *****city or country ...The other sentence is open I think.It wants you to tell what you know about the Service Line , role and associated qualification in detail.
Thanks, I reworded it , can you help me to check it again?

Why have you chosen to apply for this particular vacancy at **** Please answer by demonstrating your knowledge of the Service Line, role and associated qualification.*(75)

**** is the world’s largest professional services organization, which helps its clients build value, manage risk and improve performance. **** is also known as the firm for all focused graduates: it supplies studying for professional qualification which will give me an excellent grounding. I chosen **** Programme in , as this role specialized in helping clients’ systems are operation effectively, also is a lovely city that I familiar with and want to stay it.

Tell us what steps you have taken to clarify your career choice by providing detailed evidence of the research you have undertaken.*(75)
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You will get angry but try to add more sentences about the service line, reports and you don^t show any evidence on your research.
Thanks for advices, I reword it again, Please help me to check it, and give your opinions. As the words limited, I have to choose some important to write, I am not sure my choice is right or not. Please say what you think, don't care how depressed or angry I will. Many thanks

Why have you chosen to apply for this particular vacancy at ****? Please answer by demonstrating your knowledge of the Service Line, role and associated qualification.*(75)
Why have you chosen to apply for this particular vacancy at ****? Please answer by demonstrating your knowledge of the Service Line, role and associated qualification.*(75)

***** is the world’s largest professional services organization, which helps its clients build valueable management risk(what are u trying to mean by this?It will be better if you change this) and improved performance. As a part of *****, the *****(department) is specialized in helping clients’ systems are operation effectively through its deep understanding of regulation and legislation and extensive industry knowledge(helping clients' systems.. is ungramamtical.Change it.I can't because I don't know what you are trying to say.)**** is also known as the firm focused on graduates because it supplies studying for professional qualifications.Moreover,this department requires the team to have strong responsibility, adaptability, communication skills and deep understanding of regulation and legislation for the necessary qualifications which in the end will give me an excellent grounding.I want to join it because it gives me an opportunity to work with talented people and ****(city) is a lovely city which I am familiar with and I will be pleased to live here.

Tell us what steps you have taken to clarify your career choice by providing detailed evidence of the research you have undertaken.*(75)

I heard this Graduate Program from "Top 100 Graduate Employers".The company's being able to reach this success and being larger than its rivals made me feel very interested in working here.One of my friends who works for the same role in this company informed me on the details of teamwork. Visiting (company name)'s website and reading its files in careeer services helped me learn that (company name) has (I will tell operation but I don't know what you mean by this operation?What kind of operation? ) in different areas as it works with a wide variety of clients.Furthermore, I joined the presentation and found it hard but full of surprises which made me be aware of the fact that it is my desired job.

Rena please answer my questions.I made a synthesis of the other two.I think this is better.

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Hi, I have to say your answer seems perfect, but it exceeds the work limit. Do you think that will be ok or not?

I applied this company is a audit company. one of "big four"

Why have you chosen to apply for this particular vacancy at ***? Please answer by demonstrating your knowledge of the Service Line, role and associated qualification.*(word limit: 75)

***** is the world’s largest professional services organization, which helps its clients build valueable management risk(what are u trying to mean by this?It will be better if you change this) (As this is a basic imformation about the company, it says the kind of company: servicing financial services to different clients, So i want to say to prove I know what they do and also it is the best, which could motivated me to join it, maybe it is not make sence) and improved performance. As a part of *****, the *****(department) is specialized in helping clients’ systems are operation effectively through its deep understanding of regulation and legislation and extensive industry knowledge(helping clients' systems.. is ungramamtical. Change it. I can't because I don't know what you are trying to say)(through accessing the company's accounts and analyzing its potential risks, it could know whether this company's financial restructure or operation systems are make sence), and whether it **** is also known as the firm focused on graduates because it supplies studying for professional qualifications(I don't think the reason is it supplies studying for professional qualifications. In my opinion, it is focused on graduates as they employ many graduates every year, but they never ask a specific major, therefore, I think they may feel it is easy to trainee graduates with its great trainee programme) . Moreover, this department requires the team to have strong responsibility, adaptability, communication skills and deep understanding of regulation and legislation for the necessary qualifications which in the end will give me an excellent grounding. I want to join it because it gives me an opportunity to work with talented people and ****(city) is a lovely city which I am familiar with and I will be pleased to live here.

I reword it again, but it still exceeds the word limit:(



Tell us what steps you have taken to clarify your career choice by providing detailed evidence of the research you have undertaken.*(word limit: 75)

I heard this Graduate Program from "Top 100 Graduate Employers". The company's being able to reach this success and being larger than its rivals made me feel very interested in working here. One of my friends who work for the same role in this company informed me on the details of teamwork. Visiting ***'s website and reading its files in Career Services helped me learn that *** supplies unique services to a wide variety of clients with its expertise(It was supposed to say working ***could give a chance to know different companies' operation, as it works with ranges of clients) . Furthermore, I joined the presentation and found it hard but full of surprises which made me be aware of the fact that it is my desired job.

I have to say this part also exceeds the work limit:(

Thanks
Why have you chosen to apply for this particular vacancy at ***? Please answer by demonstrating your knowledge of the Service Line, role and associated qualification.*(word limit: 75)

***is one of the world's professional organizations helping its clients build their systems without potentional managemet risks and have an improved performance by their utmost knowledge of regulation, legislation and industry potentiality.**** is known as the firm focused on graduates.It doesn’t need academic background, but it supplies studying for professional qualifications, which in the end will give me an excellent grounding.I want to join it because it gives me an opportunity to work with talented people, and ****(city) is a lovely city which I am familiar with and I will be pleased to live here.

Tell us what steps you have taken to clarify your career choice by providing detailed evidence of the research you have undertaken.*(word limit: 75)

I heard this Graduate Program from "Top 100 Graduate Employers". Reaching this success and being larger than its rivals made me become interested in working here.One of the graduates working in this company informed me on the details of teamwork.On vsiting ***'s website helped me learn *** supplies unique services to a wide variety of clients with its expertness.Furthermore, I joined the presentation and found it hard but full of surprises making me realise that it is my desired job.

Well ,these are much better.I can't make them much shorter.I hope these don't exceed the word limit.
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