The given line graph compares four distinct Brighton tourist attractions in England in terms of their proportion of travelers over the course of three decades.

Looking at the illustration, it is immediately evident that all categories experienced a downward trend, with the exception of the the Pavilion and the Pier. Another key features is that the Pier registered the lowest figures in most years.

It can be seen from the graph that in the year 1980, the percentage of people visiting the Brighton festival stood at 30%, compared with approximately 21% that of the Art Gallery. After 30-year period of fluctuating decrease, the proportion of visitors going to the Festival was roughly 21% in 2010. A different pattern was seen in the Art Gallery, whose figure rose steadily to about 37% at the beginning 5 years before soaring considerably to under 10% in the remaining years.

In the same 30-year period surveyed, other attractions in Brighton followed increasing pattern. Stood at almost 22% in 1980, the percentage of tourists paying a visit to the Pavilion climbed steeply and hit the peak at nearly 50% in the year 1995, followed by a gradual decline of around 20% 15 years later. The period between 2015 and 2030 also witnessed a light growth to almost 22% in the figure of the Pier, about 10% lower than that of the Pavilion.

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The given line graph compares four distinct Brighton tourist attractions in England in terms of the percentage of tourists visiting the country who came to that destination. their proportion of travelers over the course of three decades. (Three decades could be 1920-1950 or 1880-1920. Give the reader all the information and the exact information. What are the names of these attractions?

Model opening paragraph.

The line graph plots the percentage of tourists visiting England between 1980 and 2010 who also visited one or more of four attractions in the city of Brighton. The Brighton attractions are the Zoo, Pavilion, Pier and Art Gallery.

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Looking at the illustration, it is immediately evident that (Those words tell the reader nothing about the information. Besides, an illustration is not the same as a graph.) all categories (wrong word. These are not categories; they are places. ) experienced (Wrong word. Only living creatures have experiences.) a downward trend, with the exception of the the Pavilion and the Pier. Another key features is that the Pier registered the lowest figures (wrong word. The graph is a figure. Use "values" or "percentages" to refer to the data. ) in most years.

(You have not yet told the reader what the years were!)

It can be seen from the graph that (Those words tell the reader nothing about the information ) in the year 1980, the percentage of people visiting the Brighton festival (Festival) stood at 30%, compared with approximately 21% that of for the Art Gallery. After 30-year period of fluctuating (wrong word. See my advice.) decrease, the proportion of visitors going to the Festival was roughly 21% in 2010. A different pattern was seen in the Art Gallery, whose figure percentages rose steadily to about 37% at the beginning 5 years before soaring (Do not use such colorful words in Task 1) considerably to under 10% ("Soaring to under 10% makes no sense. "Soar" means to go up. A change from 37% to 10% is not going up.) in the remaining years.

In the same 30-year period surveyed, (You still have not told the reader the range of years on the Y-axis.) other attractions in Brighton followed an increasing pattern. Stood (wrong form) at almost 22% in 1980, the percentage of tourists paying a visit to the Pavilion climbed steeply and hit a the peak at nearly 50% in the year 1995, followed by a gradual decline of around 20% over the next 15 years later. The period between 2015 and 2030 (Where are those years on the graph?) also witnessed (Wrong word. Only living creatures witness things.) a light growth to almost 22% in the figure (wrong word) of the Pier, about 10% lower than that of the Pavilion.


Points for the "overall" paragraph" You should write 2-3 major observations. Here are some examples.

The highest percentage for all the attractions during the entire period was for Pavilion, which attracted about 48% of the tourists in 1995. The rank order of popularity in 1980 was Festival, Pavilion, Art Gallery and Pier, with a difference of 20% (30% versus 10%) between the most and least visited destination. The ranking was quite different in 2010, with Pavilion being the highest, followed by Festival, Pier and the Art Gallery. The percentage visiting Festival varied the least over the period; staying in the range of 25-30% and that of Art Gallery had the highest variation, between 8% and 38%.