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Question: The best way to improve health is to do exercise regular exercise. To what extent do you agree?

These days, humans are all concerned about health problems, some individuals feel that the most effective method in ameliorating health is to do exercise every day. I strongly agree with the idea that doing exercise is the key to good health. Additionally, I believe that it is also vital for humanity to have and build their own balanced diet. On the one hand, people should definitely do exercise in their spare time. This will show responsibility to their health since it is an obvious way to tackle the disease. As an illustration, people can lose weight significantly. Then, they will avoid many kinds of illness related to being overweight such as obesity or high blood pressure. Furthermore, if we do physical activities regularly, then it will provide us with lots of energy. Consequently, your emotions, as well as motivation might be improved, so you will be able to work all day productively. On the other hand, this technique will ensure that you can get a better lifestyle unless you overdo it. In other words, you should not do exercise excessively. Another good solution to increase the feeling of well-being is to set up a balanced diet. For instance, you should follow the instructions of a dietician to organize your everyday portion. This method will ensure that you will absorb large quantities of the essential component from your food and so it enables you to have a much better fitness since your health is determined by what you eat. Besides, these nutrients can also help to ease the symptoms of depression and anxiety. Moreover, a good diet is crucial for adolescents and children whose bodies require a lot of nutrients for growth. In conclusion, to address an increasing population of unfit, overweight people, changing the lifestyle by doing exercise is the easiest and most effective way to use. Likewise, having a healthy diet also should be considered.
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Sorry AlpheccaStars for such a mistake like this. Actually, I already divide my essay into paragraphs but when I copy it from Word and paste in here it suddenly doesn't divide into paragraphs anymore. I will fix this error and hope you will evaluate my essay

my correct essay:

These days, humans are all concerned about health problems, some individuals feel that the most effective method in ameliorating health is to do exercise every day. I strongly agree with the idea that doing exercise is the key to good health. Additionally, I believe that it is also vital for humanity to have and build their own balanced diet.

On the one hand, people should definitely do exercise in their spare time. This will show responsibility to their health since it is an obvious way to tackle the disease. As an illustration, people can lose weight significantly. Then, they will avoid many kinds of illness related to being overweight such as obesity or high blood pressure. Furthermore, if we do physical activities regularly, then it will provide us with lots of energy. Consequently, your emotions, as well as motivation might be improved, so you will be able to work all day productively. On the other hand, this technique will ensure that you can get a better lifestyle unless you overdo it. In other words, you should not do exercise excessively.

Another good solution to increase the feeling of well-being is to set up a balanced diet. For instance, you should follow the instructions of a dietician to organize your everyday portion. This method will ensure that you will absorb large quantities of the essential component from your food and so it enables you to have a much better fitness since your health is determined by what you eat. Besides, these nutrients can also help to ease the symptoms of depression and anxiety. Moreover, a good diet is crucial for adolescents and children whose bodies require a lot of nutrients for growth.

In conclusion, to address an increasing population of unfit, overweight people, changing the lifestyle by doing exercise is the easiest and most effective way to use. Likewise, having a healthy diet also should be considered.

Question: The best way to improve health is to do exercise regular exercise. To what extent do you agree?


These days, humans (poor word choice. Native speakers only use the noun "human" when we are comparing with other animal species or intelligent machines.) we are all concerned about our health problems, (Not everyone is sick! Comma splice error. Do not join main clauses with a comma. Read this page about this error. https://chompchomp.com/terms/commasplice.htm) some individuals feel that the most effective method in ameliorating (wrong usage) achieving and maintaining good health is to do exercise every day. I strongly (That is not an adverb of extent. It is a good word here, but to answer the question, you should use an adverb of extent.) agree with the idea that doing exercise is the key to good health. Additionally, I believe that it is also vital for humanity (poor word choice ) to eat a have and build their own balanced diet.


Better thesis statement: Note the use of the adverb of extent: completely

I do not completely agree with this statement, since, although doing exercise is a key to good health, it is not sufficient. Eating a balanced nutritious diet is equally vital.



On the one hand, (wrong transition usage. This phrase is used when you plan to argue the opposite side.) Certainly, people should definitely do exercise in their spare time. This will show responsibility to their health since it is an obvious way to prevent tackle (wrong word) the disease. (What disease are you talking about? Your transition is poor. You do not connect exercise logically to losing weight. Not all people need to lose weight. You must take the situation you are thinking about out of your head and explain it to the reader. ) As an illustration, by engaging in regular aerobic exercise, overweight people can lose weight significantly. Then, they will avoid many kinds of illness related to being overweight such as obesity or high blood pressure. Furthermore, if we they (Do not switch from third person - he, she, they - to first person - I, we - or second person - you) do physical activities regularly, then it will provide us them with lots of energy. Consequently, your their attitudes emotions, as well as motivation might be improved, so you they will be able to work all day productively. However, people On the other hand, this technique will ensure that you can get a better lifestyle unless you overdo it. In other words, you should not do exercise excessively (Why? You need to develop the idea. People training to run a marathon exercise a lot - running 150 km per week. Is that unhealthy? If you do not want to explain this point, then delete it.

You also need a better transition to carry the reader's attention from exercise to diet. )

But regular exercise does not guarantee good health, it must be accompanied by a proper diet.

Another good solution to increase the feeling of well-being (Off topic. ) is to set up follow a balanced diet. For instance, The best way to do that is to you should follow the instructions of a dietician to organize your meals. everyday portion. This method will ensure that you will absorb the meals contain protein, carbohydrates and essential vitamins and minerals, and not too much sugar and fat. have large quantities of the essential component from your food and so it enables you to have a much better fitness since your health is determined by what you eat. (very awkward - the sentence is too rambling.) Besides, these nutrients can also help to ease the symptoms of depression and anxiety. Moreover, a good diet is crucial for adolescents and children whose bodies require a lot of nutrients for growth.

In conclusion, to address an increasing population of unfit, overweight people, (None of that was in the instructions. Do not invent new instructions. Focus exactly on the task.) changing the lifestyle by doing exercise is the easiest and most effective way to be healthy, both physically and mentally. However, a balanced diet is required to complete a healthy lifestyle. use. Likewise, having a healthy diet also should be considered.


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