Hello to you all dear visitors of my topic.

Following is the letter of motivation I am willing to send to the applicants administration at CT university. Before I wrote it, I read through a number of guides written by EnglishForward members here, and tried to implement their advice in my letter. This is the result, I wish you review it and point out any elements that need to be fixed / changed/ ADDED , or ommitted etc.
I want you to wear the boots of the head of the department who will decide to accept me or not, and give me your feedback about my letter. Thank you

( highlighted in yellow are only for your notice, I dont think they should be included in the letter itself )

Dear Madam / Sir,

My name is (name). I am an Arab Palestinian living in Israel. I have graduated from (university name) with a BA in English and in Arabic languages and literature. I am determined to continue my academic study for the MA degree in Conflict Resolution, the faculty for Political Sciences. Completing this step of my life's plan is crucial for the role in life I aspire to take, being an Arab Palestinian living in the Israeli Jewish state, with numerous conflicts in need for a resolution; political, national, social, educational, religious, and recently, conflicts of gender roles within the Palestinian Arab minority; a unique minority in its land, facing harsh and growing difficulties and challenges on all levels.
Through this letter of motivation, accompanied by a letter of recommendation by Dr. (name), and my CV; I will explain why it is important for me to study conflict resolution at the (university name), and why I consider myself eligible for the program.

Who am I in detail
In my second year at the (university name) I joined XXX, a student party that works inside the Israeli campuses as well as within the Arab society, aiming to promote education in the Arab sector and bolster the social, cultural, and national components of the Arab-Palestinian identity in the Jewish state.

In the third year I was appointed the manager of external relations, where I was responsible for statements and publications that we released on different occasions like the national days, in addition to press releases and reports regarding our activities inside and outside the campus.

In my third year I was elected the head of XXX, and that was the first year -after 13 years of XXX's activity- in which XXX participated in the elections for the Arab students Committee, a committee whose members represent all of the Arab political parties in the university. In that year I lead many debates that brought together members of the various parties that ran for the elections, and I shaped the agenda of XXX's student services and political activities for the next year. We won the elections and the position of the committee's chairman.
In the last year of my BA study, I was the head of the Arab Students Committee in (university name). and a member in the Arab Students Union, which is the only official body that represents all Arab Palestinian students inside Israel. According to the testimonials of the students, that year witnessed a revolution in all aspects of studental work and an unprecedented collaboration between the different parties, for the sake of the Arab students' and their social, political, and academic interests.

Currently, I work at (association name) for Human Rights, where I am in charge of media and external relations, publications, human rights reports, and press releases. I am also responsible for the contacts with the other local and international human rights organizations and activists who share with us the concern of promoting and defending human rights, particularly in hot zones like the Palestinian territories and Israel, where we are basically active.

What and why I want to do in detail

Dear Madam / Sir,
Every day I become more certain that the conflicts that are increasingly influencing my life are not merely conflicts between moderates and extremists, rights and lefts, Arabs and Jews, Israelis and Palestinians. It is now becoming more apparent that other complexities and disputes between the different approaches and parties of the Arab minority itself are also affecting and indeed shaping the future of this minority inside Israel.
Conflicts between the secular and the religious; the nationalist and the communist; the liberal and the conservative; those who support the Arabs' engagement in the Israeli state's political and governing system, and those who prefer to boycott "the occupation's institutions"; those who support Arab troops in the Israeli Army, and those who consider it a treason; those who are pro homosexual activists and others who condemn excessive sexual freedom, and the list goes on.
Living a life full of such conflicts that regardless of my will, will eventually affect and determine many aspects of my life; and being an educated man striving like many others to promote and develop my community and help to sustain a better understanding and a mutual respect between its various, sometimes conflicting elements, I have many times played the role of a mediator who attempted to get both sides of the conflicts to a point which they both agree at, which I then used as the engine that powered my advances.
I have practiced this and other methods during my service as a leader for XXX Studental Movement, and the chairman of the Arab Students Committee in (university name), and in various other local and national congregations, forums and boards.
That being said, and myself still practicing mediation and intervention between conflicting parties which just seem to be getting more intense; I have started to feel the need of new, academic, proven tools and skills of mediation and dispute direction, that would guarantee a maximum competence and capability of the mediator to get the opposing forces to a point of agreement.
At this point, I found the program for Conflict Resolution offered by the Political Sciences faculty of (university name), which aims primarily:

1- To acquaint students with the different approaches to, and styles of negotiation and mediation. To achieve this, students will be expected to analyse conflicts, identify the interests of the disputing parties, design intervention strategies and separate out the issues that can be dealt with through different processes.
2- To equip students with elementary negotiation and mediation skills. Students will be expected to be mediators, disputants and negotiators during these simulated exercises. (*)

And I could not think of a way better than this to explain what I needed.


In a nutshell, I am very ambitious to play such a very productive role as a mediator and a seeker for conflicts resolutions in my community that internal conflicts is the last thing it should be concerned about.
And although I consider myself as having the adequate mental, social and communication skills needed for managing a conflict, I believe that there is still much to learn in order to be reliable for engaging the more serious issues that concern my people and to be sufficiently qualified to undertake such a challenging and certainly crucial mission.
I therefore wish that your honor would approve my application that I am going to submit, and accept me as a student for MA degree in Political Sciences, the program for Conflict Resolution.

With respect,

(*) http://www.publiclaw.uct.ac.za/course/conflict_resolution /
Anybody please ?
is there a problem with my post preventing anybody from replying ?
Students: We have free audio pronunciation exercises.

Firstly, be sure to check the actual courses offered by UCT. The one you've chosen is only one subject within a whole degree so you need to look at UCT postgraduate prospectus first. http://www.uct.ac.za/students/postgraduates/handbooks/ download the "graduate school of humanities"handbook.

Next, there are quite a few grammatical errors in your letter which you are going to have to fix. If possible get a native English speaker to go over it for you .

Also "dear sir/madam" should only come at the beginning of the letter not in between so remove that.

And remove the direct qoute from their website, it is unnecessary.

otherwise you are on the right track by giving them an example of where you applied your skill and explaining why you ant to study there. Good luck.

A fellow UCT applicant.
Dear iceq, did you get admitted? I read your motivation letter and I found it very convincing. I'm trying to get admitted to a foreign university, myself and I read your post as and inspiration for writing my own. So, did your motivation letter get you admitted to the university you were applying to?