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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

Write at least 250 words.

Task

There has been much debate regarding the effects of advertising on purchasing demand. While many people believe that the ubiquity of promotion makes it less attracting, I would argue that commercials have been significantly effective to increase the number of consumers.

On the one hand, the problem of advertising is that it does not only appear with a high level of frequency but also unpredictable. For example, Youtube, a popular social network, integrates at least one advertisement in every video, however, those advertisements often emerge in the middle of a film or even a song. That would make viewers lose track of the part of programs, movies which they have just watched a moment ago, and also lose their interests put into those shows. As a result, the viewers tend to overlook the content of the advertisements and skip them as soon as possible.

On the other hand, I would argue that promotion plays an important role in drawing customer’s attention. To begin with, advertising is designed to target a wide range of viewers, which means contents of advertisements vary according to the types of customer. For instance, commercials aimed at kids have colourful images and catchy songs, making them interested in that particular product. In this regard, they can dominate the market to boost the sale rate of a company. Moreover, advertisements are repeated over and over on TV or the internet, consequently, they become memorable to viewers. In this way, customers may choose to purchase the familiar products rather than what they have never seen before.

In conclusion, while some people tend to ignore commercials because of their omnipresence, I believe that the contribution of advertising is undeniable in the sale rate of products. (286 words)

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There has been much debate regarding the effects of advertising on purchasing demand. Many students open with a statement saying that there is a "controversy" "debate" or "heated discussion" of other such things. There isn't any. This is known to be a memorized response. Examiners do not reward memorized responses. You are only asked to make a choice of two sides and argue your position. ) While many people believe that the ubiquity of promotion (Not a good synopsis. - It is all the advertising around us.) makes it less attracting,(wrong form) I would argue that commercials have been significantly effective in increasing to increase the number of consumers.

On the one hand, the problem of advertising is that it does not only appears with a high level of frequency but also unpredictably. (You need the adverb, not the adjective.) For example, Youtube, a popular video sharing social network, integrates at least one advertisement in every video, (wrong punctuation. Comma splice error.) however, those advertisements often emerge interrupt in the middle of a film or even a song. That would make viewers lose track of the part of programs, movies (missing conjunction) which they are watching have just watched a moment ago, and also lose their interests (wrong form) put into in those shows. As a result, the viewers tend to overlook the content of the advertisements and skip them as soon as possible.

On the other hand, I would argue that advertisement promotion plays an important role in drawing customer’s attention. To begin with, advertising is designed to target a wide range of viewers, which means the contents of advertisements vary according to the types of customer. For instance, commercials aimed at kids have colourful images and catchy songs, making them interested in that particular product. In this regard, they can dominate the market to and boost the sale rate sales of a company. Moreover, advertisements are repeated over and over on TV or the internet, consequently, they become fixed in the memory of memorable to viewers. In this way, customers may choose to purchase the familiar products rather than what they have never seen before.

In conclusion, while some people tend to ignore commercials because of their omnipresence, I believe that the contribution of advertising is undeniable critical to the success of companies. sale rate of products. (286 words)

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Hello, I found this topic in Cam 15 Test 3 Writing Task 2. I would be really happy if you can give me feedbacks and the band score I would get, so I can improve more.
Thank you so much!

Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

Write at least 250 words.

Task

There has been much debate regarding the effects of advertising on purchasing demand. While many people believe that the ubiquity of promotion makes it less attracting, I would argue that commercials have been significantly effective to increase the number of consumers.

On the one hand, the problem of advertising is that it does not only appear with a high level of frequency but also unpredictable. For example, Youtube, a popular social network, integrates at least one advertisement in every video, however, those advertisements often emerge in the middle of a film or even a song. That would make viewers lose track of the part of programs, movies which they have just watched a moment ago, and also lose their interests put into those shows. As a result, the viewers tend to overlook the content of the advertisements and skip them as soon as possible.

On the other hand, I would argue that promotion plays an important role in drawing customer’s attention. To begin with, advertising is designed to target a wide range of viewers, which means contents of advertisements vary according to the types of customer. For instance, commercials aimed at kids have colourful images and catchy songs, making them interested in that particular product. In this regard, they can dominate the market to boost the sale rate of a company. Moreover, advertisements are repeated over and over on TV or the internet, consequently, they become memorable to viewers. In this way, customers may choose to purchase the familiar products rather than what they have never seen before.

In conclusion, while some people tend to ignore commercials because of their omnipresence, I believe that the contribution of advertising is undeniable in the sale rate of products. (286 words)

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