Please, somebody could help me to check my report. Emotion: smile

Thanks a lot

Kela
THE BOY WHO COULDN’T READ

INTRODUCCION:

This article is about a guy named Rommel Sales, he was a nice boy that was in fourth grade, in spite of that he was unable to read or write. He was illiterate.

Although he was an intelligent boy, he had a serious learning problem and nobody had done anything him. Just a teacher invested his time and put his own plan into practice for help him. Perhaps he was fed up with using the same teaching methodologies to teach to read and write.

He decided to use different and strange ways to help him. Despite having a lot of people believed Rommel couldn’t do it.

SUMMARY:

In one opportunity a Mildred Green Elementary School’s teacher wanted to know some abilities from his new students, he decided to gave them a strange homework, they had to prepare a report about “what flavor would you want to be if you will be an ice cream”.

When he started to read the reports, he was worry about a blank piece of paper, there weren’t any information in it. He wanted to know who wasn’t done his report.

It could be a very difficult work, there were many children in his classroom and the cafeteria was full of people. Finally, he could find him. He was Rommel Sales.

Apparently, Rommel looked well, the teacher believed that he couldn’t have any problems, despite trying to obtain some information about him, he asked him some question about Rommel’s live, his hobbies, what did he does in his last vacation. Little by little he tried to gain Rommel’s confidence, he wanted to know if he could read or not.

The teacher proved Rommel’s abilities from read. He gave to him a book, this book was very easy to read there weren’t any complicated words, and it could be to read for beginner readers. Rommel felt afraid of this, he took the book, when he opened it, he could recognize the first word, but after that he couldn’t understand anything. Rommel tried to give some excuses about that. In fact, the teacher could confirm that he couldn’t do it.

Rommel described himself like a boy that doesn’t like to participate in any activities, he demonstrated that he was interested in other kind of hobbies.

He was good at drawing Japanese’s cartoons but it wasn’t enough. It was a dramatically situation for him because he didn’t know what he should be from Rommel.

He couldn’t believe how was possible that a boy could be in fourth grade if he couldn’t read, and how anybody had done anything about it. He couldn’t do anything for change it.

After long time, he continued teaching at the same school. He worked hard for obtain a certificate from a very important University in Michigan whereas the students was improving his self. All of them had done it except Rommel.

He couldn’t believed it, nobody pay attention at Rommel’s problem. He had a meeting with a teacher, he reached a stupid conclusion about him, he can’t read, that’s all. Whereas his classmates were reading or writing he was doing anything else.

He believed that he was a clever guy, because he didn’t have any problem about learn math.

Rommel could understand the plots of books that the teacher read for his students to improve their reader’s abilities. Rommel participated in the speeches and he lived the story that the teacher tells them.

After that, he took an important decision. He put a plan for helps him into practice. He used different methodologies to teach to him. Even though, he didn’t receive compensate for do it, they shared few minutes by day together reading an interesting and amazing book, Harry Potter.

His methodology to teach him was so funny. The teacher started to read whatever line from the book and Rommel had to recognize a specific word, it was “OFF”. If he couldn’t do it, he would receive a punishment, a soft pinch. If he identified the word the teacher could continue telling him the story.

Before long weeks, in spite of practice a lot, Rommel couldn’t learn to read. He felt disappointed and guilty about it. But the true was that the system had responsibility because they didn’t do anything to resolve it.

Rommel’s teacher likes so much to read. He had a lot of different kinds of books in his small apartment. He gave to him a special gift, a VCR tape and a book, that maybe helps Rommel to do it his extra job.

In this opportunity they spend more hours together until Rommel could read. They worked hard and took the responsibility until they could obtain at good result. The teacher encouraged him to introduce his self into the amazing literature’s world.

He tough him since the elemental things, how he had to pronounce each letter until he could recognize all of them. Rommel, like good draftsman, he was able to create an ingenious system that could help him to remember his lesson. He used some picture for each one letter, if he couldn’t remember one, he would check it on the wall.

Before a hard work and a long time, Rommel started to read in front some classmates and the woman that believed he never could do it. He can read whatever kind of literature and he enjoys doing it. Don’t stop him now.

Now he had to learn to write and he began to do it with some help from his dear teacher.

Hi KELA. I made a start. Am I correcting too much?

INTRODUCTION:

This article is about a guy named Rommel Sales, a nice boy who, even by the fourth grade, was still unable to read or write. Although he was an intelligent boy, he had a serious learning problem that nobody had done anything about. Only one teacher invested his time in the boy. Perhaps, because this teacher was fed up with the failure of his usual teaching methods, he decided to try different and strange ways to help the boy, even while a lot of people believed Rommel was a lost cause.

SUMMARY:

A Mildred Green Elementary School teacher wanted to test the abilities of his new students. He gave them an assignment to prepare a written answer to this question: What flavor would you want to be if you were an ice cream?

When the teacher saw the finished papers, he was worried about one that was totally blank. He wanted to know who hadn't done his report.

It was Rommel Sales.

Because Rommel appeared to look healthy and well, the teacher assumed whatever problem existed could not be serious. He began by asking Rommel about his life, his hobbies, and what he did during his last vacation. Little by little, he tried to gain Rommel’s confidence, because what he really wanted to determine was whether Rommel could read or not.

So he gave him a book, a book that was written for beginners, and contained no complicated words. Rommel felt afraid, but he took the book, opened it, and recognized the first word. But after that, he couldn’t understand anything. Though Rommel tried to give some excuses, the teacher's suspicion was confirmed: the boy could not read.
For the rest, Kela, I'm going to give you hints (in blue), so that you can try to improve things yourself. (A repeated problem is your use of indefinite pronouns--for instance, writing 'he' when the reader doesn't know which person 'he' refers to.

Rommel described himself as a boy who doesn’t like to participate in any activities, he demonstrated that he was interested in other kind (plural) of hobbies. (Two sentences.)

He was good at drawing Japanese’s (punctuation) cartoons but it wasn’t enough (for what?). It was a dramatically (adverb/adjective?) situation for him (who?) because he (who?) didn’t know what he (who?) should be from (preposition) Rommel.

He couldn’t believe that it was possible for a boy to be in fourth grade if he couldn’t read, and he couldn't believe that noone had done anything about it. He couldn’t do anything to change it (what?).

For a long time, he continued teaching at the same school. He was working hard for (preposition) obtain a certificate from a very prestigious university in Michigan where the students was (plural) improving themselves. All of them had done so except Rommel.

He couldn’t understand how nobody had paid attention to Rommel’s problem. He (does this teacher have a name?) had a meeting with a fellow teacher, who had reached a stupid (word choice) conclusion about him: "Rommel can’t read, that’s all". While his classmates were reading or writing (comma) Rommel was doing something else.

He (who?) believed that he was a clever guy, because he (who?) didn't have any problem about learn (present participle) math.

Rommel could understand the plots of books that the teacher read for his students to improve their reading abilities. Rommel participated in the speeches and he lived the story that the teacher tells (past tense) them.

After that (what?), he (who?) made an important decision. He tried a new teaching plan. Even though, he didn’t receive compensation for it, the teacher spent an extra few minutes each day with Rommel, reading together an interesting and amazing book, Harry Potter.

His method was unusual. The teacher would read a line from the book, then Rommel would be asked to recognize one of the words. If he couldn’t do it, he would receive a punishment, a soft pinch. If he could identify the word (comma) the teacher would continue telling him the story.

After many long weeks, in spite of practice (present participle) a lot, Rommel was still not able to to read. He felt disappointed and guilty about it. But the truth was that the whole educational system was at fault because nothing had been done to resolve the problem.

Rommel’s teacher likes (past tense) so much to read. He had a lot of different kinds of books in his small apartment. He gave Rommel a special gift, a VCR tape and a book that might help him to make an extra effort.

This gift created new opportunities for the two of them to spend more hours together, until, finally, Rommel could read. They had worked hard until they obtained a good result. The teacher encouraged Rommel to immerse himself in the amazing world of literature.

He taught since him the elemental things, and how he had to pronounce each letter until he could recognize all of them. Rommel, like (article) good draftsman, --he-- was able to create an ingenious system that helped him to remember his lesson. He created a picture for each one letter (period) If he couldn’t remember a letter, he would check its picture on the wall.

After a long time of hard work, Rommel began reading in front of some classmates and also before the woman who had never believed in his ability to do it. Rommel was gradually able to read any kind of literature and he enjoyed doing it. Don’t stop him now.

Now he has to learn to write. And he has begun to do so, with a little help from his dear teacher.
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I should add, Kela, that, despite all the blue marks, this is good writing for someone in the process of learning English as a second language. Look at me, I can only write in one language. Keep going. You are making a fine effort, and the mistakes above are common ones.
Thanks for your message and for encourage me to continue to learn English. If you want I will teach you Spanish Emotion: big smile

Kelly