The following sentences contain words and phrases that interfere with
the sincere, reasonable tone good writers try to create. Rewrite each sentence,
replacing sarcasm, sentimentality, cuteness, invective, and pretentiousness
with more appropriate language.
1. The last dying rays of day were quickly ebbing in the West as if to signal
the feline to begin its lonely vigil.
2. Only a jerk would support the President’s Mideast peace plan.
the sincere, reasonable tone good writers try to create. Rewrite each sentence,
replacing sarcasm, sentimentality, cuteness, invective, and pretentiousness
with more appropriate language.
1. The last dying rays of day were quickly ebbing in the West as if to signal
the feline to begin its lonely vigil.
2. Only a jerk would support the President’s Mideast peace plan.
1. The last dying rays of day were quickly ebbing in the West as if to signal
the feline to begin its lonely vigil. This seems OK to me. It's just a very literary tone. Only the word 'feline' seems a bit unnatural to me. Perhaps 'tiger'?
2. Only a jerk would support the President’s Mideast peace plan. I'd replace 'jerk' with eg 'fool'.
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As the sun was setting the feline knew to begin it's lonely vigil.