The line graph illustrates the proportion of tourists to England who visited four destinations at Brighton in over the period 30 years starting in 1980.

A glance at the graph, it is clear that the number of people visited Pavilion and Pier escalated into the period. By contrast, there was a downward trend in proportion of tourists visited Art Gallery and Festival in the same time.

At the beginning, the number of people visited Pavilion developed significantly from 23% in 1980 and reached the peak at nearly 50% in 1995 but that declined considerably to 30% in 2010. Into the period, beginning with 10% in 1980, the proportion of visitor visited Pier experienced an upward trend and peaked the highest point at 22% in 2010.

On the other hand, the quantity of tourists visited Art Gallery surged from over 20% in 1980 to nearly 40% in 1985. However, there was a dramatic decline trend in number of people visited Art Gallery in next 25 years and dropped at nearly 10% in 2010. Meanwhile, the amount of visitors visited Festival diminished slightly from 30% in 1980 to 28% on 2010.

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The line graph illustrates the proportion of tourists to England who visited four destinations at Brighton in over the period of 30 years starting in 1980.

A glance at the graph, it is clearly shows that the number of people who visited the Pavilion and the Pier escalated into during the period. By contrast, there was a downward trend in the proportion of tourists who visited the Art Gallery and the Festival in the same time.

At the beginning, The number of people who visited the Pavilion developed significantly, going from 23% in 1980 and reaching a ed the peak at of nearly 50% in 1995. However, but that number declined considerably, dropping to 30% in 2010. Into the During that same period, beginning with 10% in 1980 [Move] the proportion of visitors who visited the Pier experienced an upward trend, beginning with 10% in 1980 and peakeding at the highest point [Peak and Highest Point say the same thing] at 22% in 2010.

On the other hand, the quantity of tourists who visited the Art Gallery surged from over 20% in 1980 to nearly 40% in 1985. However, there was a dramatic decline trend in the number of people visited the Art Gallery in over the next 25 years, and droppeding to at nearly 10% in 2010. Meanwhile, the amount of visitors who visited the Festival diminished only slightly from 30% in 1980 to 28% on 2010.

Two notes:

First you can say either "the number of people who visited the Festival," OR "the number of people visiting the Festival," but you must say one or the other.

Second, I advise you to study the use of the definite article more fully.

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