hi i m huzefa 24 yrs of age from india would like help on my letter of motivation for my master in fashion management at paris heres the letter plz help

Dear Sirs,Madam
I ***** 23 yeas of age , having completed my masters in commerce and a diploma in fashion designing, and after gaining sufficient work experience from the different industries, would like to study and explore the opportunity to study and gain international experience. And I believe Paris is the place where I can do that.
I have studied my Bachelors of Commerce and my Masters of Commerce from Mumbai University, and have worked as insurance agent, as marketing assistant and assistant designer *** merchandiser. My strength has been my marketing and organization skills.
Fashion designing is my passion and to open a fashion house is my dream and to fulfill my dream I require guidance and I think I can find it with this program offered by your university.
I developed my interest in fashion designing only after my college, when I attended a workshop by a fashion designer. I was always good at drawing but could find the focus and the path which I would like to pursue and after that workshop fashion designing was it.
After that I enrolled myself for one year diploma in fashion design at the Le Mark Institute of Art (Mumbai), as I was commerce student I didn’t have any knowledge of this field.
This course helped to learn the fundamentals of design and I not only improved my skills but was good at it too. Besides drawing I also learned illustration, pattern drafting, apparels, embroidery, computer aided designing and little of textiles too.
One of my learning experience from this course is the whole process of designing a collection for our institutes graduating students fashion show, where every team of three students were to design a collection of six garments i.e.3male, 3female on a particular theme .I learned that how a design on paper is made into garment and how many process it has to go through like material sampling, pattern making, embroidery, accessories and trials etc. My team had designed western casuals with the theme being bright colors.
My fascination with Paris stated when I was learning French at Alliance Francais de Mumbai. At Alliance I came to know the fascinating French culture and Paris being fashion capitol of the world bowled me over. Paris the being the birth place of fashion has so much history and culture to explore and learn from it.
During my course at alliance there were a lot of workshops and seminars which made me familiar to the amazing and interesting French culture. I also learned that there were a lot of similarities between English and French language
I would like to study in paris at your university because i am sure that Mod-Art would provide me with the expertise, personal interaction and intercultural experience necessary for me to achieve my professional as well as personal objectives.
I am applying for the MA in Marketing course at Mod-art for three reasons. The first is that the course precisely matches my particular area of interest in marketing: namely, merchandising and international marketing, brand management. The second is the high reputation of your school for producing outstanding graduates and keeping pace with changes in the world of fashion. And the third is your close relationship with well known global fashion companies, which ensures that theoretical expertise is supported by real experience of culture-based communication and global market strategy analysis. The combination of these factors makes your MA in Marketing course the natural choice for me at this point in my career.

my paragraph and sentence construction is not so grt and i doubt htis letter is goin in flow of events plz help u can either answer back here or on my email <deleted by mod>.
thanks huzefa
"I****** 23 yeas of age , having completed my masters in commerce and a diploma in fashion designing, and after gaining sufficient work experience from the different industries, would like to study and explore the opportunity to study and gain international experience. And I believe Paris is the place where I can do that. "

*** We do not normally put our name in a letter in this manner. This structure is reseved for legal documents, such as a will!

Is it necessary to put your age?

*** "Having completed my masters degree in commerce, and obtained a diploma in fashion designing, I undertook work experience in different industries. I now seek the opportunity to study and gain international experience. As the centre of the international fashion industry, Paris would be the perfect place to gain this experience.

I obtained the Bachelor of Commerce and the Master of Commerce at Mumbai University, and have worked as insurance agent, a marketing assistant and an assistant designer *** merchandiser, and I have strong marketing and organization skills.

Fashion designing is my passion, and to open a fashion house is my dream. To fulfill my dream I require guidance, which I believe I will find in the program offered by your University.

My interest in fashion design developed after graduation, when I attended a workshop by a fashion designer. I am skilled in drawing, and this workshop gave me a focus, and opened a potential career path for me. I subsequently undertook a 1 year diploma in fashion design at the Le Mark Institute of Art (Mumbai).

I learned the fundamentals of design and I not only improved my skills but found I have a natural flair. I also learned illustration, pattern drafting, apparels, embroidery, computer aided designing and undertook some study of textiles. I learned how a design on paper is made into garment, and how many process it has to go through such as material sampling, pattern making, embroidery, accessories and trials etc.

One of my learning experience from this course is the whole process of designing a collection for our institutes graduating students fashion show, where every team of three students were to design a collection of six garments i.e.3male, 3female on a particular theme .

As part of the course, students were required to design a collection for our institute's graduating students fashion show. Teams of three students were to design a collection of six garments,3 male and 3 female, on a particular theme. My team elected to design western casuals with the theme being bright colors.

My fascination with Paris began when I was learning French at Alliance Francais de Mumbai. At Alliance I attended many workshops and seminars which introduced me to French culture, and to Paris as the fashion capital of the world, both of which I found very exciting. In addition to being the birth place of fashion, Paris has so much history and culture to explore and learn from.

I am applying for the MA in Marketing course at Mod-art for three reasons.

1. The course precisely matches my particular area of interest in marketing: namely, merchandising and international marketing, brand management.

2. The high reputation of your school for producing outstanding graduates and keeping pace with changes in the world of fashion.

3. Your close relationship with well known global fashion companies, which ensures that theoretical expertise is supported by real experience of culture-based communication and global market strategy analysis.

The combination of these factors makes your MA in Marketing course the natural choice for me at this point in my career.

I would like to study in Paris at your University because I am sure that Mod-Art would provide me with the expertise, personal interaction and intercultural experience necessary for me to achieve my professional as well as personal objectives.

*** Where I have put numbers (1,2,3) you could use bullet points, which would look better.
Respected Sir

I *******, 23 yeas of age , have completed my masters degree in commerce from the university of Mumbai and a diploma in fashion designing, and have gained sufficient work experience, would not like the opportunity to study and gain international experience. And I believeParis is the place where I can prove my ability.
I have worked as insurance agent, as marketing assistant and assistant designer cum merchandiser. My strength has been my marketing and organization skills.
Fashion designing is my passion and to open a fashion house is my dream and to fulfill my dream, I require your guidance as I think I can find it by the course offered by your university.

I enrolled myself for one year diploma in fashion design at the Le Mark Institute of Art (Mumbai) which helped to improve the fundamentals of design. I learned illustration, pattern drafting, apparels, embroidery, computer aided designing and a part of textiles too.
One of my learning experience from this course is the whole process of designing a collection for our institutes, where every team of three students were to design a collection of six garments i.e.3male, 3female on a particular theme( My theme being BRIGHT COLORS), where I also learned the techniques to design on paper and to make it into a garment the process it has to go through like material sampling, pattern making, embroidery, accessories and trials etc.
My fascination with Paris started when I was learning at I was learning French at Alliance Francais de Mumbai.At Alliance I came to know the fascinating French culture and Paris being fashion capitol of the world bowled me over.Paris being the birth place of fashion has so much history and culture to explore and learn from it.
During my course at alliance there were a lot of workshops and seminars which made me familiar to the amazing and interesting French culture

I would like to study in paris at your university because i am sure that Mod-Art would provide me with the expertise, personal interaction and intercultural experience necessary for me to achieve my professional as well as personal objectives.
I want to apply for the MA in Marketing course at Mod-art for three reason:-

The first is that the course precisely matches my particular area of interest in marketing: namely, merchandising and international marketing, brand management.

The second is the high reputation of your school for producing outstanding graduates and keeping pace with changes in the world of fashion.

And the third is your close relationship with well known global fashion companies, which ensures that theoretical expertise is supported by real experience of culture-based communication and global market strategy analysis.

The combination of these factors makes your MA in Marketing course the natural choice for me at this point in my career.

Thank – You.

Hoping for a positive reply.

Your’s Faithfully,

******

Farida

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Hey this huzefa
can you please delete this thread and the letter and its post
everything
i am grateful for all your help and now i want you guys to delete my profile and my letter
this is a request to the moderators and administrator of english forum
please could you do it as soon as possible

thanks in advance
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Hello, Huzefa,

Generally we don't delete threads to which replies have been made, I'm sorry. All I can do is to edit your name out of the posts. Let me know if you want this.

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Hello
I would be very grateful if you could edit/delete/replace my name from the post and the letter and also from all the replies i have made the post too

thanks
huzefa
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hey this is huzefa .

please edit my name from the letter also , it would be even if u edit my last name from the letter also please atleast ...

would be really grateful

thanks

huzefa
OK. That should do it.