+0
Hello
I am not sure whether these sentences are right or not?
Can you help me check them and tell ne how to revise them
Thank you very much

As a result of obtaining appropriate love and concern, he will be shape into a positive and optimistic attitude to face the rest of his lives.

Only when children receive formal education, do they become moral, intellectual, and responsible adults.
+0
Here's what I would do, Wang Chun:

'If he receives love and concern, he will develop a positive, optimistic attitude toward life.'

'Only when children receive a formal education do they become morally and ethically responsible adults.'
Comments  
Hello Mister Micawber
Thank you for your help
WANG CHUN