Hello Everyone,
I'm so excited that there exists such a forum where we can help each other improve our English. Althought I've been in this country for a number of years, I'm far far away from acquiring the ease with writing English as that of a native speaker. So I hope any native speakers out there can be brutally honest with your thoughts on my writing. Don't worry, I don't know where you live
Long story short, I'm trying to write to my employer to apply for a leave of absense. Any of your contructive input is much appreicated! Specifically, I'm wondering what you think of the tone, message, and any usage issues that's natural to spot for a native speaker reading my letter.
Thank you in advance!
Terri
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Dear ___,
I hope you are doing well. In the 8 months that I have been on board with [company name], I have had the pleasure to work with a dedicated team of colleagues and managers. My contributions to the team has included supporting proposal efforts, internal marketing decks, and provide deliverables to the client’s satisfaction. Unfortunately, my current circumstances require that I take some time off so I can continue perform in ways that meet the team's expectations. Here are the circumstances surrounding the applicaiton for unpaid leave of absence:
Thank you for your consideration. Please let me know if you have any questions.
Regards,
Terri A.
I'm so excited that there exists such a forum where we can help each other improve our English. Althought I've been in this country for a number of years, I'm far far away from acquiring the ease with writing English as that of a native speaker. So I hope any native speakers out there can be brutally honest with your thoughts on my writing. Don't worry, I don't know where you live

Long story short, I'm trying to write to my employer to apply for a leave of absense. Any of your contructive input is much appreicated! Specifically, I'm wondering what you think of the tone, message, and any usage issues that's natural to spot for a native speaker reading my letter.
Thank you in advance!
Terri
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Dear ___,
I hope you are doing well. In the 8 months that I have been on board with [company name], I have had the pleasure to work with a dedicated team of colleagues and managers. My contributions to the team has included supporting proposal efforts, internal marketing decks, and provide deliverables to the client’s satisfaction. Unfortunately, my current circumstances require that I take some time off so I can continue perform in ways that meet the team's expectations. Here are the circumstances surrounding the applicaiton for unpaid leave of absence:
- I am in poor health condition and I haven’t been feeling well for the past 2 months. On a recent visit to the doctor, he advised me that my health condition needs immediate attention. The doctor advised that I take time off for treatment and rest. I am currently working with the doctor to go through treatment and am under close observation and evaluation.
- A major cause for my current state of health is due to family the fact that my family is undergoing relationship hardship. It has become necessary for its members to step back and work out some deep rooted issues in order to keep it together. The process has been emotional and physically draining for all involved. I feel that it is in the best interest of me and [company name] for me to take some time off enough so that I can be a productive employee upon my return.
Thank you for your consideration. Please let me know if you have any questions.
Regards,
Terri A.
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I would like to apply for xxxx weeks/months unpaid leave. My health has recently become poor and my doctor is recommending that I take time off for treatment. I attach a copy of his letter recommending this course of action.
While I am aware that I have not been long with the company, I am committed to it and am anxious that my contribution to the team with which I am working is not affected. Therefore I feel this period of leave is essential.
Please let me know when I can come and discuss this matter with you.
Here's the guideline from the FMLA site: The employer is allowed to ask the employee to obtain a certification from a medical provider testifying to the need for the employee to take the leave for themselves
Your problem arises in that the Family/Medical Leave Act only requires them to grant you unpaid leave with a guarantee of a position when you return if you've been there for a year. However, if your company is treating this as an FMLA situation, your health care provider should be providing the medical facts, and only the medical facts.
If your company is not treating this an FMLA situation, then I agree with Feebs. Be as brief as possible in the written letter and say that you will discuss your personal medial history in person at their convenience.
If your health condition is such that you may be protected under the Americans with Disabilities Act, it may be worth looking into your rights there too.
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Tahnking you,
with regards
Jaydip Ghose
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Cc: "Joyjit Chakraborty " <Email Removed>, "Mr. Barun Ray" <Email Removed>
Date: 11/13/2007 08:59 AM
Subject: Extension of Leave due to Bandh.
Sir,
I have applied for Leave from 14/11/2007 to 17/11/207. Suddenly the General Strike of Bangla Bandh was announced by all opposition Parties on 12/11/2007 & 13/112007. In this context I was forced to come to Durgapur with due permission of Airport Manager by Telephone on 11/11/2007 after completing my Duty on 11/11/2007.Fotunately the Strike was called off for 13/11/207 at night. Now it is impossible and impractical for me to attend my morning duty (8a.m. to 4p.m. ) at Airport, Kolkata which was about 165 k.m. from Durgapur. So, I talked with Airport Manager and he told me if you have due leave then you can take the leave.
So, I fervently request you to kindly approve my leave from 12/11/2007 to 17/11/2007(6 days). Because I have taken 12 days leave until now in the whole year and I have 30 days due Leave.
Thanking you and expecting a favorable response from your end.
Joyda, I have already talked with you last night and I have already informed Barunda about my leave. Please do the needful because this Leave is very important for me.
Warm regards,
Jaydip Ghose,
FMS Engineer, Jet Lite (India) Ltd., NCSBI Airport, Dum Dum.
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