Dear EnglishForward people!

I would be very grateful for your help with my motivation letter to apply for a Master program ...

Here is it:
(and thank you soooo much in advance)

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing to apply for Erasmus Mundus Master degree program in Global Studies.

At the moment I am a student of a European Studies Master course in ***Institute, *** (till September). In 2006 I graduated *** with honors and got Master degree in German and English Philology.

I have a special interest in the Erasmus Mundus Master Course in the Global studies as in the one of the few interdisciplinary undergraduate majors in international studies with a special focus for globalization and its political, cultural, economical and environmental consequences. I find its program a perfect combination of both humanities and social and political sciences, I’ve been always interested at.

My interest in humanities motivated my choice of my first major. In the same time I tried to realize myself in the other areas, working as a journalist and taking an active part in the political life of my country and various international volunteer projects.

I have always been interested in development and ecological issues: in 2007 for example I coordinated volunteer projects in Mexico and Peru, a “fair trade” and ecological workcamps in Mexico and “street kids” projects in Peru with “***”.



After my experience of working in the international social and ecological projects I was willing to gain some theoretical background knowledge, so that I could pursue a career in this area. This desire motivated my application for the Master course in European Studies in ***Institute in ***. I find the current course program with its focus on European politics, culture, law, economics and social politics extremely interesting. Though I would like to broaden my knowledge and get an idea of international politics, economics and culture. I would like to apply for Master Course in Global studies as I have been always interested in the global trends and issues that affect all societies: interactions of peoples, cultures, economies, and polities; the globalizing processes of the communications media; technological and environmental changes; human rights’ violations and political, ethnic and religious conflicts. I think Master course in Global studies would provide me with an opportunity to develop an understanding of traditional and modern Asian, African and Latin American countries by studying the geography, history and culture of those nations. I would like to know more about traditional societies, nationalist and independence movements and contemporary challenges, what attempts to achieve social justice, a decent standard of living and general progress can be a success. Through the studies of world civilizations I would get the better understanding of European civilization and the place of my own country in the world. I hope that the gained knowledge would also help me as a journalist to create a right picture of my country in the international media. I hope I would gain the methods to analyze the global trends independently in the end of the course.

I consider the course and the institution where the course is offered would give me a chance to pursue a career in international organizations or NGOs, where I could give my part to bringing the world together across traditional national boundaries. I am sure that the gained knowledge would help me to make a right decision whether I am involved in decision-making.

Thank you very much for considering my application. I look forward to your positive response.

Sincerely,

*

PS: There are also few documents I would like to send later if possible: the results of my TOEFEL test I would take in January, the reference letter from the new supervisor of my thesis.
Lebatonne:
I have made a few suggestions. You can make this better by writing an outline of your main points. That will help you to avoid repetition.

I am writing to apply for the Erasmus Mundus Master degree program in Global Studies.

At the moment I am a student of a European Studies Master course in ***Institute, *** (till September - if you say this, then "at the moment" is not true. Also the verb tense should be past tense, or possibly present perfect). In 2006 I graduated *** with honors and earned a Master degree in German and English Philology.

I have a special interest in the Erasmus Mundus Master Course in the Global studies as (subject-verb is missing here) in the one of the few interdisciplinary undergraduate majors in international studies with a special focus on globalization and its political, cultural, economical and environmental consequences.

I find its program a perfect combination of both humanities and social and political sciences, Comma splice!) I've been always interested at (wrong preposition).

My interest in humanities motivated my choice of my first major. In the same time I tried to realize (wrong verb, perhaps "to explore other areas") myself in the other areas, working as a journalist and taking an active part in the political life of my country and various international volunteer projects.

I have always been interested in development and ecological issues: in 2007, for example, I coordinated volunteer projects in Mexico and Peru, a "fair trade" and ecological work camps in Mexico and "street kids" projects in Peru with "***".

After my experience of working in the international social and ecological projects I was willing to gain some theoretical background knowledge, so that I could pursue a career in this area. This desire motivated my application for the Master course in European Studies in ***Institute in ***. I find the current course program with its focus on European politics, culture, law, economics and social politics extremely interesting. (you repeat yourself) Though I would like to broaden my knowledge and get an idea of (by studying? - "get an idea of" is too casual) international politics, economics and culture. (previous sentence does not have a main clause) I would like to apply for Master Course in Global studies as I have been always interested in the global trends and issues that affect all societies: interactions of peoples, cultures, economies, and polities; the globalizing processes of the communications media; technological and environmental changes; human rights' violations and political, ethnic and religious conflicts. (the prior sentence is run-on, and you repeat yourself again) I think that the Master course in Global studies would provide me with an opportunity to develop an understanding of traditional and modern Asian, African and Latin American countries by studying the geography, history and culture of those nations. I would like to know more about traditional societies, nationalist and independence movements and contemporary challenges, what attempts to achieve social justice, a decent standard of living and general progress can be a success. Through the studies of world civilizations I would get a better understanding of European civilization and the place of my own country in the world. I hope that the knowledge I will gain would also help me as a journalist to create a right (favorable? accurate? ) picture of my country in the international media. I hope I would gain the methods to analyze the global trends independently by the end of the course.

I consider the course and the institution where the course is offered would give me an opportunity to pursue a career in international organizations or NGOs, where I could give my part (play my part in bringing) to bringing the world together across traditional national boundaries. I am sure that the gained knowledge would help me to make )the right choice whenever I have tough decisions to make.) a right decision I am involved in decision-making.

Thank you very much for considering my application. I look forward to your positive response.

Sincerely,

PS: There are also few documents I would like to send later if possible: the results of my TOEFEL test I will (or expect to) take in January, and the reference letter from the new supervisor of my thesis.
Thank you so much!