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Hi,
I'm having trouble editing this sentence:

"TPEGs are grants designed to help a student cover his/her tuition and textbooks when these expenses exceed a certain portion of the student's family contribution to his/her education."

Most notably, the 'student's family contribution' part because I would think that family would need to be possesive. I've tried to rearrange the sentence but have not had much success.

Any suggestions? Any help would be very appreciated.
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First off, the 'his/her' is awkward:

"TPEGs are grants designed to help students cover tuition and textbooks when these expenses exceed a certain portion of the family contribution to education."

I don't think that 'family' need be possessive, nor do we need all the pronouns; it is quite clear without.

However, I'm not sure that the overall semantics are right-- the grant is given when expenses are above a certain portion of the family education expense? Shouldn't it be 'when expenses exceed a certain portion of family income?