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I've written a piece of advertisement for a toy - short descriptions/introduction which will be printed on the toy's box - but I'm sure it isn't grammatically correct nor does it sound good.

The amazing flash flying ring flies straight up to 50m far - Super bright , auto light-up LED lamps create magic rainbow across the sky - Easy to play (or easy play?) with launcher

This toy is a kind of flying ring with LEDs on it, and these LEDs will automatically be lit up upon throwing the ring. The thing I called "launcher" is a tool with rubber strings to shot the ring instead of throwing it by hand - I think it must have a name but I don't know ^_^
The text above is just the beginning of the introduction which will be printed on the box. Please help me correct it and make it sound more interesting and attractive. Thanks in advance.
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Hi,

Welcome to t he Forum.

I've written a piece of advertisement for a toy - short descriptions/introduction which will be printed on the toy's box - but I'm sure it isn't grammatically correct nor does it sound good.

The amazing flash flying ring flies straight up to 50m far - Super bright , auto light-up LED lamps create magic rainbow across the sky - Easy to play (or easy play?) with launcher

This toy is a kind of flying ring with LEDs on it, and these LEDs will automatically be lit up upon throwing the ring. The thing I called "launcher" is a tool with rubber strings to shot the ring instead of throwing it by hand - I think it must have a name but I don't know ^_^
The text above is just the beginning of the introduction which will be printed on the box. Please help me correct it and make it sound more interesting and attractive. Thanks in advance.


This kind of writing requires skill. If I were good at it, I could make a lot of money. But, I'll try.

MAKE A MAGIC RAINBOW!

FLASHES AND FLIES UP TO THE SKY!

SUPER-BRIGHT AUTOMATIC LIGHT-UP LED LIGHTS!

WITH FREE EASY-USE LAUNCHER!

Best wishes, Clive
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fatblackchicken, the type of writing you are talking about here, as Clive says, is pretty specialized. You may want to seriously consider hiring a professional writer who specializes in copywriting. (Not to disparage Clive's suggestion, of course.)
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i like your name btw
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Thanks a lot Clive. It really sounds much better.
P.S: There's more of the text and I might need help later.
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