prompt :write your report for the college principal as outlined : CARRERS CONFERENCE

VANCOUVER HALL , Friday-Sunday,9am-6pm

exhibition-over 100 differents jobs

talks on wide range of careers

experts available to give advice

notes on students's views

-exhibition great

- some talks good

-not enough people to answer questions

-better for science students than language or history students

A REPORT ON CAREERS CONFERENCE

A BROAD OVERVIEW OF THE CONFERENCE

The conference was held in the sophisticated Vancouver Hall .It took place on Friday and Sunday from 9am to 6 pm . It displayed an exhibition which pertains over 100 jobs.

PURPOSE OF THE CONFERENCE

The conference served a main purpose of introducing a wide range of careers. However , it did not stop at providing surface-level answers. The conference gravitated more towards delivering more in-depth, comprehensive antidote to students's unease of their future prospects. This conference had this merit because there was a board of committee encompassed by groups of eminent experts to dispense their sage advice .

OPINIONS OF STUDENTS

Most of the students expressed their satisfaction with the conference. However, there are two problems at hand that we need to resolve. First, a lot of students's questions remains unsanswered due to a deluge of students but limitations of the number of experts. Second, the conference is better-suited for science-allied students than language or history students .

RECOMMENDATIONS

Overall, it appears that students are comparatively satisfied with the conference , with the exception of scant number of experts , especially those from language or history field. It is suggested that we should multiply the number of experts who are a wealth of knowledge for language or history students .

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 1 You are studying at a college in Canada. Recently you and some other students attended a two-day Careers Conference. As the college paid for you, the College Principal has asked you to write a report about the conference and you have made notes on their views. Read the conference programme together with your notes below. Then, using the information appropriately, write a report for the Principal explaining how useful the conference was and making recommendations for next year. 

It would help you to write a better report if you had ever attended a career fair. Apparently you are unfamiliar with this type of event, which is very common in North America.

Here is a picture of the exhibition space taken at a career conference. You can see the company representatives at the booths who give students information about careers at their company.

So you might want to rewrite your report.



A REPORT ON CAREERS CONFERENCE

A BROAD OVERVIEW OF THE CONFERENCE

The conference was held in the sophisticated (unlikely word) Vancouver Hall .It (spacing error) took place on (1. wrong word) Friday and Sunday from 9am (spacing error) to 6 pm . It (spacing error) displayed (2. wrong word) an exhibition which pertains (3. wrong word, wrong usage of this word) over 100 jobs.


"On Friday and Sunday" means that it was closed on Saturday. That is not true.

2. 3. It had an exhibition space with over 100 booths for company representatives giving and passing out information about their jobs.



PURPOSE OF THE CONFERENCE

The conference served a main purpose of introducing us to a wide range of careers. However , (spacing error) it did not stop at providing surface-level answers. The conference gravitated more towards delivering more in-depth, comprehensive antidote (wrong word) to students's (wrong possessive plural form) unease of their future prospects. This conference had this merit because there was a board of committee (wrong expression ) encompassed by groups of eminent experts to dispense their sage advice . (spacing error)

OPINIONS OF STUDENTS

Most of the students expressed their satisfaction with the conference. However, there are two problems at hand that we need to resolve. (wrong expression. You are not expected to resolve these problems. ) First, a lot of students's questions remains unsanswered due to a deluge (wrong word) of students but limitations of the a limited number of experts. Second, the conference is better-suited for science-allied students than language or history students .

RECOMMENDATIONS

Overall, it appears that students are comparatively satisfied with the conference , with the exception of the scant number of experts , especially those offering careers for language or history majors. from language or history field. It is suggested that we should multiply (wrong word) the number of corporations experts who are a wealth of knowledge for language or history students .

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thank you very much for answering my question. I have some questions about word choice .

1. Can i replace antidote with key, solution?

2. can i replace multiply with upshift or should i write increase twofold?

3. What about board of committee and a deluge of ? Honestly,i can think of any words to replace them. Would you mind recommending me some ?

Cinder Nguyen1. Can i replace antidote with key, solution?

Antidote:

If you are bitten by a poisonous snake, you must take an antidote as soon as possible, or you could die. Antidotes to the venom of common snakes should be carried in your backpack when you go on a hike.


Anecdote: a short amusing story from your personal experience.

Jason always keeps us in stitches with his funny anecdotes.

What is the sentence you want to use?

Cinder Nguyen2. can i replace multiply with upshift or should i write increase twofold?

Use of upshift

Some cars do not have an automatic transmission. They are called stick-shifts. You have to manually upshift or downshift when you want to increase or decrease your speed.


Increase twofold does not seem good, either.


What is the sentence you want to use?

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Cinder Nguyen3. What about board of committee and a deluge of ?

The phrase " Board of committee " makes no sense.

A " board " is a group of people that advise the president or the chairman of a company or association. Boards are usually permanent. e.g. We elect our school board every two years. They make decisions on teacher's salaries, the school curriculum and the school district's budget.

A " committee" is a group of people assigned to do a particular task. Once the task is done, the committee disbands. " Standing committees " are permanent. They have a very specific function.
Our civic club requested people to serve on a committee to devise some changes to the deed restrictions.
Our civic club has a security committee to investigate neighborhood crimes and to make suggestions to make the neighborhood safer.


Most of the time, each conference session will have one person give a lecture, followed by a question-and-answer period (Q&A) where people in the audience can ask questions.

Sometimes they will have a panel discussion, with five or six experts. Each will present a short introduction of themselves. Then they will ask each other questions. This may be followed by a question-and-answer period.


Deluge is used for sudden floods of water, as in a tsunami.

It is sometimes used metaphorically as in " I was deluged by a wave of incoming orders. " yesterday. In a formal report, you should avoid metaphors.

What is the sentence you want to use?

The conference gravitated more towards delivering more in-depth, comprehensive antidote (wrong word) to students's (wrong possessive plural form) unease of their future prospects.

You wrote that antidote is the wrong word . Because of that i want to ask Can i replace antidote with key, solution?

a way of preventing or acting against something bad :Regular exercise is the best antidote to tiredness and depression . source : online cambridge dictionary This is what i found on dictionary. In my view, the uasge of antidote is quite suitable .But i don't know , maybe i am wrong

It is suggested that we should multiply (wrong word) the number of corporations experts who are a wealth of knowledge for language or history students .

you wrote that multiply is the wrong word so i want to ask can i replace multiply with upshift or should i write increase twofold

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