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The line graph illustrates how many commuters used national rail network, London Underground and light rail & metro systems in Great Britain from 1950 to 2004/5.

Overall, the National rail network and London Underground witnessed a fluctuation during the period shown and they had quite a similar trend from 1980 to 2004/5. Furthermore, the number of people using light rail & metro systems was always the smallest during the period from 1960 onwards.

In the year 1950, there were one billion and nearly 750 million passenger journeys made on the national rail network and London Underground in turn, while light rail & metro systems was not put into use. Over the next 32 years, the national rail network and London Underground hit the lowest point of about 625 and 500 million journeys respectively in 1962. Light rail & metro systems appeared around 1962, then the quantity of people using it dropped gradually to 0 in 1980

From 1980 onwards, there was a substantial increase of 500 each in the number of the national rail network and London underground users, and the trend for both ways of transport was quite similar. Light rail & metro system underwent a slight increase to over 125 million users in 2004/5

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Please read my advice for Task 1 essays. You make the usual mistakes.

Wrong words: witness, fluctuation, illustrate. Many beginning writers do not use these words correctly.

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You need to study the graph and the instructions. A lot of your writing was inaccurate.


The line graph illustrates (not a good word choice) how many commuters (wrong word. It does not show numbers of commuters. It show the number of trips or journeys. The people who took these journeys are not defined as commuters.) used national rail network, London Underground and light rail & metro systems in Great Britain from 1950 to 2004/5.

Overall, the National rail network and London Underground witnessed (wrong word. Trains do not witness things. Only people witness, see, or experience things.) a fluctuation (wrong word) during the period shown and they had quite a similar trend from 1980 to 2004/5. Furthermore, the number of people (You did not study the graph well enough. It does not show people, travelers or users.) using light rail & metro systems was always the smallest during the period from 1960 (Wrong number. There was no service in 1960.) onwards.

In the year 1950, there were one billion and nearly 750 million passenger journeys made on the national rail network and London Underground in turn, while light rail & metro systems had not been built yet. was not put into use. Over the next 32 years, the national rail network and London Underground hit the lowest point of about 625 and 500 million journeys respectively in 1962. Light rail & metro systems appeared around 1962, then the quantity (wrong word. Quantity is not used for people or countable things. It is mostly for non-count things like water, sugar and petrol) of people using it dropped gradually to 0 in 1980

From 1980 onwards, there was a substantial increase of 500 (500 trips is a very small number, isn't it? That does not match what is on the graph.) each in the number of the national rail network and London underground users, (wrong word) and the trend for both ways of transport was quite similar. Light rail & metro system underwent a slight (wrong word - slight means quite small. It was a great increase, given that there were no journeys at all in 1980 and 125 million 25 years later.) increase to over 125 million users (wrong word) in 2004/5 (missing punctuation)

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