Task 1:
The two given visuals illustrate how a small museum changed after some developments in the year 1990 and 20 years later.
Overall, the museum witnessed radical changes with the most notable being the rebuilding of some facilities and the transformation of the remaining amenities on the map.
What stands out first is the reconstruction of some infrastructure. The cottage, which was located in the bottom left-hand corner in 1990, was replaced by a new coffee shop in 2010. Beside, the splitting of the exhibition room which placed top of the diagram also was a significant attention.
On the other hand, there was a dramatically transformation of some facilities' size in this visual. The parking lot, which had been occupied just a half of the opposite landside of the entrance, was expanded into a bigger one after 20 years. The shop was extended during this time, dragged on the resizing of the west exhibition room. The rest site of the diagram remained unchanged at this time.
Task 2:
Nowadays, people tend to isolate themselves from their relationships whenever they want to find new employment. While this trend is beneficial in some respects, its drawbacks are more significant for the followers of this trend. This essay will discuss the advantages of an individual who finds new work, splits off from their family and friends, followed by the disadvantages of this problem.
To begin with, there are a lot of detriments that exist when some people move far away from their homes. Firstly, an individual in this situation will not have anyone nearby if they get sick. By the way, they will have to do everything related to their health care on their own, including go to the hospital, buy medicine, cook, and so on. Furthermore, these people will have no advice in their new job, which was an experiment by their predecessor. led to difficulties in directing their judicious career. However, some parents involve too much in their children's decisions. But we can see that an under-control kid is still better than the another who chooses opinions for themselves, fails, and becomes a bad guy.
In addition, the importance of friends' impact on one's career also cannot be denied. People possibly cannot get benefits if they get away from good friends, especially in their emotional aspects. People who do not have any friends to talk with could get stressed or have some psychology-related problems. Sometimes, friends also instruct us to expand a new range of skills, particularly in some work we did not know before. However, this is not the case for people who have been the vice's victims trying to get a new life, got away from drugs, alcohol, and even their bad friends. This way out could be beneficial for them.
In conclusion, I do not think that people can get benefits if they move far away from their relationships because of those reasons mentioned above.
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Task 1:
The two given visuals illustrate how a small museum changed after some developments in the year 1990 and 20 years later.
Overall, the museum witnessed radical changes with the most notable being the rebuilding of some facilities and the transformation of the remaining amenities on the map.
What stands out first is the reconstruction of some infrastructure. The cottage, which was located in the bottom left-hand corner in 1990, was replaced by a new coffee shop in 2010. Beside, the splitting of the exhibition room which placed top of the diagram also was a significant attention.
On the other hand, there was a dramatically transformation of some facilities' size in this visual. The parking lot, which had been occupied just a half of the opposite landside of the entrance, was expanded into a bigger one after 20 years. The shop was extended during this time, dragged on the resizing of the west exhibition room. The rest site of the diagram remained unchanged at this time.
Task 2:
Nowadays, people tend to isolate themselves from their relationships whenever they want to find new employment. While this trend is beneficial in some respects, its drawbacks are more significant for the followers of this trend. This essay will discuss the advantages of an individual who finds new work, splits off from their family and friends, followed by the disadvantages of this problem.
To begin with, there are a lot of detriments that exist when some people move far away from their homes. Firstly, an individual in this situation will not have anyone nearby if they get sick. By the way, they will have to do everything related to their health care on their own, including go to the hospital, buy medicine, cook, and so on. Furthermore, these people will have no advice in their new job, which was an experiment by their predecessor. led to difficulties in directing their judicious career. However, some parents involve too much in their children's decisions. But we can see that an under-control kid is still better than the another who chooses opinions for themselves, fails, and becomes a bad guy.
In addition, the importance of friends' impact on one's career also cannot be denied. People possibly cannot get benefits if they get away from good friends, especially in their emotional aspects. People who do not have any friends to talk with could get stressed or have some psychology-related problems. Sometimes, friends also instruct us to expand a new range of skills, particularly in some work we did not know before. However, this is not the case for people who have been the vice's victims trying to get a new life, got away from drugs, alcohol, and even their bad friends. This way out could be beneficial for them.
In conclusion, I do not think that people can get benefits if they move far away from their relationships because of those reasons mentioned above.