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Topic: Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, there are many unsatisfying circumstances that people have to face with, for example, jobs with bad conditions or with insufficiently salary. Some people may accept under no condition, while others may try their best to move on in such conditions. I think both opinion are reasonable in some way.

To begin with, the reason why some people accept the bad situations is that they just want to have a peaceful life, or they might be afraid to take a risk. This could help them to get a guarented life and they also very satisfy with it. However, it seems to be that their life can be very boring since there is not any challenge, also the money they recived will just enough to afford their basic needs and it will be very difficult for them to success in their career.

On the other hand, since the world is develop with a fast pace, it will be very essential for people to move on and develop their career. I think they usually very energetic and are willing to carry out any difficult task. From that point, they will not only accomplish success but also gain many knowledges, experiences and even money. Thus, even it is not easy to try on and improve their life, but it worth trying because “no pressure, no diamonds”.

Overall, though each choice has its own benefits and jeopardies, i would prefer to take a risk, because the more you do and dare, the further you can get.

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You have many word errors in your writing. Many verb forms are not grammatical, and you use adverbs instead of adjectives, nouns instead of verbs.


Nowadays, there are many unsatisfying circumstances that people have to face with, for example, jobs with bad conditions or with insufficiently (wrong form) salary. Some people may accept under no condition, (wrong expression) while others may try their best to move on in such conditions. I think both opinion (wrong form) are reasonable in some way. (You will do much better if you pick one side and explain why you did.)

To begin with, the reason why some people accept the bad situations is that they just want to have a peaceful life, or they might be afraid to take a risk. This could help them to get a guarented life and they also very satisfy (wrong form) with it. However, it seems to be that their life can be very boring since there is not any challenge, also the money they recived will just enough (wrong form) to afford their basic needs and it will be very difficult for them to success (wrong word. success is a noun, not a verb.) in their career.

On the other hand, since the world is develop (wrong form) with a fast pace, it will be very essential for people to move on and develop their career. I think they usually (wrong form) very energetic and are willing to carry out any difficult task. From that point, they will not only accomplish success but also gain many (wrong word) knowledges, (wrong form - knowledge is non-count.) experiences and even money. Thus, even it is not easy to try on (wrong verb) and improve their life, but it worth trying because “no pressure, no diamonds”.

Overall, though each choice has its own benefits and jeopardies, i (wrong word - i is a letter. ) would prefer to take a risk, because the more you do and dare, the further you can get.

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thank you, but how can i correct the words "under no condition", "opinion" and "satisfy"?

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lhanh1909"under no condition"

Here is an example of that phrase:

Under no condition should you go to a store without wearing a mask.

lhanh1909 "opinion"

You wrote:

I think both opinion ...

Both = two.

What should the form of a noun after "two" be?

Which one is correct?

a. I have two brother.
b. I have two brothers.

lhanh1909"satisfy"?

You wrote:

This could help them to get a guarented life and they also very satisfy with it.

The sentence is quite poor English.

Here is one possibility but it is not very good, either. What do you mean to say? If they have such a terrible job that they hate going to work each day, is that good? If they make barely enough salary to pay for the basics, food and rent, is that good?


This could help them to stay in a comfortable life that they are satisfied with.

i understand, thank you so much.

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