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Some people prefer to live in a small town, others prefer to live in a big city. Which place would you prefer to live in? Give reasons to support your opinion.

Nowadays, most of all young people prefer to live in a big city and I am no exception. I was born in a small town, but I am living in a big city right now and I like this city so much because it is very convenient.

Firstly, living in current city I have a more comfortable life and better services. As you know a big city is such a big market because it attracts a large of people to go there for living, and most of them are young and active. So I can be easy to find many things there that are not available in a small town. Actually, every new products and services go to big cities first. So those would be available to you first if you lived there. Also, there are many good schools, universities, modern hospitals in big cities. Cause that you and your family have a higher cost life. Of course, you can gain them all even though you live in a small town. But you have to pay more money and more patience.

Moreover, living in a big city provides us more opportunities. As far as I approach above, it is a big market, so it attracts many investors to grow their business there. That why I can be easy to have a good job there. It helps me to have a good future.

On the other hand, although living in a small town provides us warm heart and friendly relations, peaceful and silent spaces, and fresh environment. These advantages can not get me back my hometown to live all my life there. But I love my hometown so I always go back whenever I take a holiday.

Anyway, even though I love my hometown. I prefer to live in a big city. It brings me a good life and many opportunities for my future.
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Nowadays, most of all young people prefer to live in a big city and I am no exception. I was born in a small town, but I am living in a big city right now and I like this city so much because it is very convenient.

Firstly, living in current city I have a more comfortable life and better services. As you know a big city is such a big market because it attracts a large of people to go there for living, and most of them are young and active. So I can be easy to find many things there that are not available in a small town. Actually, every new products and services go to big cities first. So those would be available to you first if you lived there. Also, there are many good schools, universities, modern hospitals in big cities. Cause that you and your family have a higher cost life. Of course, you can gain them all even though you live in a small town. But you have to pay more money and more patience.

Moreover, living in a big city provides us more opportunities. As far as I approach above, it is a big market, so it attracts many investors to grow their business there. That why I can be easy to have a good job there. It helps me to have a good future.

On the other hand, although living in a small town provides us warm heart and friendly relations, peaceful and silent spaces, and fresh environment. These advantages can not get me back my hometown to live all my life there. But I love my hometown so I always go back whenever I take a holiday.

Anyway, even though I love my hometown. I prefer to live in a big city. It brings me a good life and many opportunities for my future.
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