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Hi,

I saw a part of an AD that said something like this:

JOB FAIR

Dec. 8&9, 2006 7:30 AM - 4:00 PM

MWD WEYMOUTH TREATMENT PLANT

700 North Moreno Avenue

Laverne, CA 91750

Can I write it like this?

We will have our Job Fair. It will be held on December 8 and 9 of 2006, from 7:30 AM till 4:00 PM, at the MWD Weymouth Treatment Plant. The address of the plant is 700 North Moreno Avenue, Laverne, CA 91750.

Can you write it better?
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We will have our Job Fair. this sounds rather informal - or as if it had been in doubt that the fair would be held and you are now able to confirm it. Better to start:

We will hold a ob Fair on on December 8 and 9, 2006, from 7:30 AM till 4:00 PM, at the MWD Weymouth Treatment Plant. The address of the plant is 700 North Moreno Avenue, Laverne, CA 91750.

We don't say 'of' a year with precise dates.
Nona The BritWe will have our Job Fair. this sounds rather informal - or as if it had been in doubt that the fair would be held and you are now able to confirm it. Better to start:

We will hold a ob Fair on on December 8 and 9, 2006, from 7:30 AM till 4:00 PM, at the MWD Weymouth Treatment Plant. The address of the plant is 700 North Moreno Avenue, Laverne, CA 91750.

We don't say 'of' a year with precise dates.

What about this one,

"We will hold a ob Fair on on December 8 and 9, 2006, from 7:30 AM till 4:00 PM, at the MWD Weymouth Treatment Plant. The address of the plant is , 700 North Moreno Avenue, Laverne, CA 91750."

or

" We will hold a ob Fair on on December 8 and 9, 2006, from 7:30 AM till 4:00 PM, at the MWD Weymouth Treatment Plant. The address of the plant is at 700 North Moreno Avenue, Laverne, CA 91750."

These type of news must have minimum words.

hope you will clarify me if I am wrong.

regards,

muhammad-19k
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What about this one,

"We will hold a Job Fair on on December 8 and 9, 2006, from 7:30 AM till 4:00 PM, at the MWD Weymouth Treatment Plant. The address of the plant is , 700 North Moreno Avenue, Laverne, CA 91750."

or

" We will hold a Job Fair on on December 8 and 9, 2006, from 7:30 AM till 4:00 PM, at the MWD Weymouth Treatment Plant. The address of the plant is at 700 North Moreno Avenue, Laverne, CA 91750."

I prefer the first sentence because the second has two "at's".
Hi, Nona.

When you have capitalized a name and made it to be a proper name, could that name take on an article like 'a' in the case as you seem to have? I think they usually take on the article 'the'.

We will hold a (J??)ob Fair on on December 8 and 9, 2006 ...
BelieverHi, Nona.

When you have capitalized a name and made it to be a proper name, could that name take on an article like 'a' in the case as you seem to have? I think they usually take on the article 'the'.

We will hold a (J??)ob Fair on on December 8 and 9, 2006 ...
Previously mentioned (or very well known): The.
First-time mentioned: A. The example here is fine with "a."
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