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My brother has to present the following- which is about his company, and its products- to some buyers. Some of them are Americans. He asked me how good his presentation is. But I know nothing about presentation.

If somebody know anything about presentation, give me some advice please. And check the grammar, also. Thank you!!

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hello everyone!
This is Hwang heeseock from Semiconductor group.
i'd like to welcome you to the meeting.
It is our wish that you'll learn a little about how we were able to achieve our position in this highly competitive industry. The subject of this presentation is our main component MAHA Second Version HP 300.
next please.

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The picture at the bottom is how our company looks like located in shiwha.
The company name is ATTO, our products are PE-CVD, Gas Supply System, Specialty Gases, F2 Generator. Atoo is founded September 27, 1991. President is sang young moon. we have 14.8 milion dollars and we have 245 employees.. next please

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This slide is about company history.
The roots of the company can be traced all the way back to 1991 sep. In 1996 sep, we registered on KOSDAQ as i mentioned. in 2000 Nov, our company launched and moved to new factory in shiwa. two years later entered into PE-CVD industry. In2004 Dec. Awarded
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I won’t comment on the presentation but I will check the grammar

page 1

Hello everyone!

This is Hwang Heeseock from the Semiconductor group.

I'd like to welcome you all to the meeting.

It is our wish that you'll learn a little about how we have been able to achieve our position in this highly competitive industry. The subject of this presentation is our main component MAHA Second Version HP 300.

Next slide please.



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The picture at the bottom is how our company located in Shiwha looks like.

The company’s name is ATTO, our products are PE-CVD, Gas Supply System, Specialty Gases, F2 Generator. Atoo was founded on September 27, 1991. Its president is Sang Young Moon. We have sales revenue of 14.8 million dollars and we have 245 employees. Next slide please



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This slide is about the company history.

The roots of the company can be traced all the way back to September of 1991. In September 1996, we registered on KOSDAQ as I mentioned. In November 2000, our company was launched and we moved to a new factory in Shiwa. Two years later we entered the PE-CVD industry. In December 2004 we were awarded XXX.

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Jisu, ask if it was revenue (total income from sales) or profit (what's left of the revenue after you subtract your expenses) of $14.8 million. Goodman and I both have some specialized knowledge of the semicondutor industry, as well.
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Thank you ! I am going to post the rest part as my brother send me his writing. Would you please help then, too?

My brother really happy with your expressions like 'revenue'. Hope you stay longer. Thank you very much!
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I recommanded my brother to read your writing. He will find out what he wants. Thank you.