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how would you rewrite this text?

Alcoholism is more likely to occur in societies that forbid children to drink but where it

is okay for adults to get drunk (Ireland), than in societies that teach children how to drink

responsibly (France, Greece). In cultures with low rates of drunkenness, adults drink and

introduce kids to drinking at the family dinner table. Alcohol is not used to mean you are

now grown-up, nor is it associated with being the "big man." You don't laugh at people

who don't drink, and you don't think getting drunk is cute, funny, or manly; people who

get bombed are considered dumb and obnoxious.

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train red 114How would you rewrite this text?

I would rewrite it so that the text continues smoothly without all those gaps. It's very difficult to read as it is now, with all those blank lines in the middle of sentences.

CJ

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Alcoholism is more likely to occur in societies that forbid children to drink but where it
is okay for adults to get drunk (Ireland), than in societies that teach children how to drink
responsibly (France, Greece). In cultures with low rates of drunkenness, adults drink and
introduce kids to drinking at the family dinner table. Alcohol is not used to mean you are
now grown-up, nor is it associated with being the "big man." You don't laugh at people
who don't drink, and you don't think getting drunk is cute, funny, or manly; people who
get bombed are considered dumb and obnoxious.