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hello

i want to get a scholarship in germany. therefore, i had to write several letters to the websites dealing with this matter. but i'm not quite sure that i was writing the proper way. please, i want to know how to write a letter to get help having a scholarship
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HI,

Start this way.

Assume someone asks you, 'Why should we give you this scholarship?'

Write down what you would say.

Clive
Clive'Why should we give you this scholarship?
i would say: a scholarship to study in germany is all i need to acheive all that i ever worked for and dreamed of. as a matter of fact, it's the only thing that's seperating me from my biggest goal wich is working in the cars industry. everybody knows that the germans are the best when it comes to making automobiles and that's why i want to get a diploma from the german collages. i would mention that i can not afford the costs of studing abroad. I wouldn't say that working in germany doesn't interest me because it really does, but as much as I'm interested in getting the knowlege they provide, it's the thing that would help me frame my skills and use them properly.

ut that mister Clive?? note that I'm still young to study in collage(16 years old). I'm just a good student and i'm trying to know what does it take to have a scholarship and work for it since now. and thanks for our support. i really appreciate Emotion: smile
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Hi,

OK, that's a start.Emotion: smile

But how would you reply if someone said this to you?.

So, basically, we should give you a scholarship so that you can get a good job and make lots of money. Is that what you are saying?

Clive
CliveSo, basically, we should give you a scholarship so that you can get a good job and make lots of money. Is that what you are saying?
as a matter of fact, what your just said about the job is not far away from the truth, but I think that no money can get me were i want to be. i've been studying since i could remember, just to reach one goal in my life: to participate in making better, cheaper, faster, cleaner automobiles. i just want to feed this hunger inside of me not only to ride good cars, but to participate in making them. and i find that the knowlege i can get in german schools will help me succeed, and why not get alot of money if it's well deserved?? it will help me get a good life to focus on my goals and better consume my energy

that's how i would reply Mr. clive. but I have one question: shall I speak more about my personal life and how hard i worked?? or do you think that he already read my file ands knows all of that??

and thank you. Emotion: smile
Hi,

I don't know. You have to decide about that.

Just remember that you are competing with other people. Your letter has to be better than the others.

Clive
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so what do you think of what i already wrote?? structurally, it it good enough? what are the mistakes a should overcome?
Hi,

For a start, you need to review what you wrote and add suitable capital letters. You should also remove any abbreviations. Would you like to do that, and then repost?

Clive
A scholarship to study in germany is all I need to acheive all that I ever worked for and dreamed of. As a matter of fact, it's the only thing that's seperating me from my biggest goal wich is working in the cars industry. Everybody knows that the germans are the best when it comes to making automobiles and that's why I want to get a diploma from the german collages.I would mention that I can not afford the costs of studing abroad. I wouldn't say that working in germany doesn't interest me because it really does, but as much as I'm interested in getting the knowlege they provide. It's the thing that would help me frame my skills and use them properly.

As a matter of fact, getting a good job is one aims in my life, but I think that no money can get me were i want to be. I've been studying since I could remember, just to reach one goal in my life: to participate in making better, cheaper, faster, cleaner automobiles. I just want to feed this hunger inside of me not only to ride good cars, but to participate in making them. and I find that the knowlege I can get in german schools will help me succeed, and why not get alot of money If it's well deserved?? It will help me get a good life to focus on my goals and better consume my energy.

THERE YOU GO Emotion: smile
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