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Some educationalists argue that non-exam, arts-base subjects such as music, drama. Art and craft should be compulsory in the secondary-school curriculum. They believe these activities can improve overall academic performances. Do you agree or disagree?
The question of either non-exam subjects such as music, drama, art, and craft should be set mandatory in the secondary-school system or not has been receiving a great deal of attention from educationalists. While some people believe that they are simply a form of creative relaxation, I believe that students could gain some benefits from those activities.
On the one hand, there are a number of advantages as non-exam subjects become compulsory. Firstly, students enrolling in drama classes could be taught to work as a team with each other. Drama requires those students to take a role in a scenario, and they have to take part in rehearsal so that it fosters the sense of group working. Secondly, after the nerve-cracking time of academic subjects, teenagers may make use of music and craft for relaxation. Furthermore, activities in music, craft prevent students from the binge-watching TV show or web drama which are believed to enhance sedentary lifestyle.
On the other hand, several drawbacks should not be overlooked. The general view has been that since not all the students were born with the innate ability of drawing or singing, they may find it struggling to accomplish the tasks in non-exam subjects. Obviously, those ones without particular talents tend to focus on exam subjects such as Maths or Physics as they find them as areas of interest. On top of that, it is inevitable that drawing could take up a large amount of time even with students who are good at it. For instance, in order to fulfill the school tasks such as homework and preview lesson, students in Vietnam have to spend a high proportion of time on them and they could not allocate time for subjects which are not considered as important as academic subjects.
In conclusion, with the pros and cons mentioned above. I believe that non-exam disciplines play a vital role in students’ learning; however, educationalists should take into account that those classes would rather be set as active extra curriculum classes than mandatory ones.

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The question of either (wrong word.) non-exam subjects such as music, drama, art, and craft should be set mandatory in the secondary-school system or not has been receiving a great deal of attention from educationalists. (That is not a true statement. You have memorized this pattern for an opening sentence. It will not impress the examiner because, in addition to being memorized, it is not grammatical or natural English. These essays are just asking for your opinion on a topic. They are not "hot topics" or "controversies" or "debates" or "receiving attention." Instead, write a sentence that shows the examiner that you understand the topic..) While some people believe that they are simply a form of creative relaxation, I believe that students could gain some benefits from those activities.

(You did not answer the essay prompt: Do you agree? The answer must be either "yes" or "no" plus your primary reason. Should these classes be required for all high school students, or just optional? "Students can get benefits" is not an answer.

If you want a good score in Task 2, you must answer the essay prompt in the first paragraph. )


On the one hand, there are a number of advantages as if these non-exam subjects become compulsory. Firstly, First, students enrolling in drama classes could be taught to work as a team with each other. Drama requires those students to take a role (wrong form) in a scenario, (wrong word.) and they have to take part in rehearsal so that it fosters the sense of cooperation. group working. Secondly, Second, after the nerve-cracking (That is not a good expression.) time of academic subjects, teenagers may make use of music and craft for relaxation. Furthermore, activities in music, craft (ungrammatical, missing conjunction) prevent students from the binge-watching TV show (wrong expression - Is that the name of a show on television?.) or web drama which are believed to enhance (wrong word - "Enhance" means to make beautiful. Is such a lifestyle wonderful and beautiful?.) sedentary lifestyle.

(You are now writing an advantages/ disadvantages essay. That is not the type of essay that this task is. You must choose one side - agree or disagree, and then in each body paragraph, give a point to support your argument. If you write the wrong kind of essay, you will not get a good score.)


On the other hand, several drawbacks should not be overlooked. The general view has been that since not all the students were born with the innate ability of drawing or singing, they may find it struggling to accomplish the tasks in non-exam subjects. ( Repetitious. For example, sports is a subject that does not have exams, but that is not the topic..) Obviously, those ones without particular talents tend to focus on exam subjects such as Maths or Physics as they find them as areas of interest. On top of that, it is inevitable that drawing could take up a large amount of time even with students who are good at it. For instance, in order to fulfill the school tasks such as homework and preview lesson, students in Vietnam have to spend a high proportion of time on them and they could not are reluctant to allocate time for on subjects which are not considered as important as academic subjects.
In conclusion, with these pros and cons mentioned (Do not use "mentioned" or "aforementioned" above. (wrong punctuation) I believe that non-exam disciplines play a vital role in students’ learning; however, educationalists should take into account that those classes would rather be set as active extra curriculum classes than mandatory ones. (I think you finally answered the essay question, but this needs to be in the first paragraph. You did not answer the secondary prompt: these activities can improve overall academic performances.

Here is the outline of this kind of Task 2, the "agree/disagree" type.


Paragraph 1: Introduce the topic. End with your thesis statement that answers the essay prompt. For example:

I agree that the liberal arts subjects, for which there are no tests or exams, must be included in the secondary school curriculum. All students must be required to take at least one of them in every year of high school because their marks in math, science, English and other subjects will be better.

Paragraph 2: Write your first reason for your opinion. Give some examples.

Paragraph 3: Write your second reason for your opinion.

Paragraph 3: Conclude your essay by briefly stating your two arguments and restating your thesis.



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