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People attend colleges or universities for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge etc.). Why do you think people attend colleges or universities? You should give reasons for your answer using your own ideas and experience.

Studiers have a tendency to enroll in academic organizations with a view to gaining new experiences , or having career preparation or enhancing knowledge. This essay will analyze this phenomenon.

First and foremost, taking part in college or any kind of education creates a solid knowledge base for students. Due to the large educational system, lectures are required the expertise of preparing a specific lesson for spreading easily to learners so virtually their ideas involve employees' reality. Therefore, self-studying to broaden information about its items is possible for pupils as they undoubtedly know which point they had better start first or later. For example, there was no particular instruction between the different tool of excel program and word program in computer, meanwhile the courses of school will teach users how to take a full advantage of these like excel application is often used to generate a state with great deal of numbers in comparison with word for document and report field by a lot of words.

Finally, it is considered to be the best place for not only intensive study about students’ fields but also changing perspective in some subjects. Instead of undergoing common knowledge of life that leads to ambiguous thoughts whether it’s true or not, a person who experiences a quality academic system will have a clear awareness of problems. As I am a medicine student, for granted, one day my teacher said that healthcare sciences put viruses which were harmless for human's body into the vaccine of COVID 19 with the purpose of exciting the immune system and avoiding the damage of other viruses being dangerous. Nevertheless, it will become a topic of debate if citizens don’t gain a deep understanding of it as they are afraid of dying from drugs in case that virus will trigger a negative impact on their body, while those learning it at university may not worry.

In conclusion, it would be a wise decision as long as following the subject taught in college or university for different aims.


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You need to brainstorm the ideas for an essay and decided on a structure before you start writing it.

Take a look at my reply in the following link to see what I mean.

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For example, in the above task, you might want to write one paragraph about career and one about other reasons.


Many people nowadays attend university, as tertiary education has become more accessible to young people. Individuals go to university, at home or abroad, for various reasons, including attaining a degree qualification, gaining knowledge in a particular field, and for other personal and social reasons.


The main reason people go to university these days is related to their career path. They enroll in tertiary programs (degrees or diplomas) to gain a recognized qualification in some professional field. For example, if someone wants to practise as a doctor, lawyer or engineer, then the first thing they must do is get a degree in their field. That means they have to attend university for a few years, pass various courses and practical tests, and eventually graduate. Their choice of subject area and university is very important for their career prospects. They need to choose a recognized institution and degree program if they are to have a chance of success in their future job. In addition, some professionals go back to university after some years of practice to stay up to date with new knowledge and discoveries in their field.


Moreover, university also teaches people important interpersonal and social skills. For example, when young people go to university, especially if studying overseas, they get the opportunity to mature as individuals and become more independent of their parents. Furthermore, university allows them to interact with individuals from various backgrounds. That enables them to learn about other cultures and to form social networks.


In conclusion, the main reasons people go to university are to get a degree, or stay up to date, in a particular professional field, and to gain personal and social skills.

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bitterchip This essay will analyze this phenomenon.

Never mention your essay!

Most students use "phenomenon" incorrectly, as you have.

If you are not absolutely confident in a word, do not use it. It will cost you a lot of points.

bitterchipWhy do you think people attend colleges or universities?

Instead, write your thesis statement - it answers that question.

e.g.

 In my experience, most people decide to get a university degree because they will be able to get a good job with career prospects.

In my experience, most people decide to get a university degree because they love to learn and do not want to work directly after high school.

Most of my friends went to university because their parents told them to do that and all their high school friends were going.

Then your body paragraphs will support your position. The thesis statement is the most important sentence in an essay.



Most of your sentences are too long, awkward and ungrammatical. Your word usage is not good.

For example:

bitterchipAs I am a medicine student

Compare a medicine man with medical students:

bitterchipself-studying to broaden information about its items is possible for pupils

Do you know the difference between pupils and students?

bitterchipIn conclusion, it would be a wise decision as long as following the subject taught in college or university for different aims.

The conclusion must also answer the essay prompt and summarize the main arguments.

Your conclusion does not answer the essay prompt at all. It answers a different question. It is not a grammatical sentence.

This is the question you might be writing about:

"Is is better to go to university or to take a job after graduating high school?"
Students: We have free audio pronunciation exercises.
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I'm so thankful for your support Would you mind giving score for my essay and letting me know it is enough to achieve band 5.5 in IELTS, isn't it ?

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bitterchip

I'm so thankful for your support Would you mind giving score for my essay and letting me know it is enough to achieve band 5.5 in IELTS, isn't it ?

You don't have much time before you sit for this exam. I have this advice:

1. Postpone your exam for 6 months and intensively study vocabulary and sentence structure in the interim. Practice writing a ton of essays and post them here for feedback. One of my recent students took IELTS and got an 8 overall and 7 for writing.

2. In the exam room, take 10 minutes to read the essay instructions very very carefully and understand the task completely. Brainstorm your main points. Pick the 2 best for the body paragraphs. Develop your ideas with examples and personal experience. Be sure to answer the essay prompt in the first paragraph.

3. Aim to write a short essay that is just over the minimum word count. You make a lot of mistakes and a longer essay will have more mistakes and that gives you a lower score.

4. Write very short, simple sentences. Your aim is communication of ideas, not convincing the examiner that you are a literary genius. If you try too hard, it will result in a disaster.

This sentence is an incomprehensible mass of words. There is no logical structure. The names of applications need to be capitalized. The phrases are unnatural.

For example, there was no particular instruction between the different tool of excel program and word program in computer, meanwhile the courses of school will teach users how to take a full advantage of these like excel application is often used to generate a state with great deal of numbers in comparison with word for document and report field by a lot of words.