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Hi,
I have a project next week .
I want to check if part of it is o.k.

This paper :

1) How does this drug affect the human body under
different circumstances?

When people use this drug without any medical prescription they may have a variety of diseases.

The first one is when people take an overdose consequently they may die because of high concentration of heroin in their body.

Moreover ,people that use this drug constantly may get the HIV and plenty of other diseases such as hepatitis etc.

The most terrible incidents concerning drugs happen when people try to carry drugs in nylon packages inside their bodies . Sometimes the packages are torn and the concentration of drugs inside the body causes immediate death.

Furthermore , gang members that are addicted to heroin may kill just to have another "shot".

In conclusion , the heroin drug is very dangerous and there is more than one way to be killed by it .
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This paper :

1) How does this drug affect the human body under different circumstances?

When people use this drug define which drug you are talking about without any medical prescription are there any circumstances at all for which heroin is prescribed?? they may have suffer a variety of diseases problems.
The first one is when people take an overdose consequently they may die and could potentially face death due to because of the high concentration of heroin in their body.
Moreover, people that who use this drug constantly may get the HIV and plenty of or other diseases, such as hepatitis, etc. if they share needles. Don't use both "such as" and "etc." together.
Terrible incidents with this concerning drugs happen also occur when people try to carry drugs in nylon packages inside their bodies. Sometimes the packages are torn and the concentration of drugs inside the body causes immediate death.
Furthermore, gang members who that are addicted to heroin may kill just to have another "shot".
In conclusion, the heroin drug is a very dangerous drug and there is more than one way to be killed by it . can lead to death in more than one way.

Don't leave a space before your punctuation mark. Put it immediately following the last letter. You should probably also talk about the horrors of addiction.
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Thank i appraiser your help !

I rewrite the text with your fixing and call me if is it right :

When people use this drug define which drug you are talking about without any medical prescription are there any circumstances at all for which heroin is prescribed?? they may suffer a variety of problems.
The first one is when people overdose and could potentially face death due to the high concentration of heroin in their body.
Moreover, people who use this drug constantly may get HIV or other diseases, such as hepatitis, if they share needles.
Terrible incidents with this drug also occur when people try to carry drugs in packages inside their bodies. Sometimes the packages are torn and the concentration of drugs inside the body causes immediate death.
Furthermore, gang members who are addicted to heroin may kill just to have another "shot".
In conclusion, heroin is a very dangerous drug and can lead to death in more than one way.

- In blue mark i need to change it ? for example :"define which drug you are talking about " what can i write about heroin?"

Thanks .