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Heres the story/ found it on:

http://mb.sparknotes.com/mb.epl?b=71&m=787292&h=ibis,scarlet

Moderator--

A few things:

1) You can't copy a long detailed portion from another website. That is what is known as copyright infringement. Your copied portion was long and detailed.

2) You should just have you link and refer others to a long detailed portion.

3) You should tell us why you want us to read it. I am not inclined to read anything if it takes me more than a couple minutes to read.

4) You should also say what you want us to do after we have read the aritcle.

Ok, this is the story about what my essay is based on. So then people would understand my essay better.
Hi MountainHiker, you said this.

How many times do we learn that the narrator is embarrassed?

1) The narrator’s embarrassment of having an invalid brother

2) I was embarrassed at having a brother

3) The narrator feels ashamed about having a brother

4) The quote shows that the narrator does not want to be ashamed

5) he will not be humiliated by having a crippled brother

That seems like overkill. You need to be more effective in making your points. When you repeat the same point over and over, you tire your reader.

Does this help you to see the problem better?

MountainHiker

The 2) I was embarrassed at having a brother : is part of my quote so even though it shows repition of embarrarssment it is suppose to relate to my reason. My reason was about 1) The narrator’s embarrassment of having an invalid brother. So then shouldn't it relate to embarrassment. I'm thinking if I have to put a topic about embarrassment then I should have examples about embarrassment.
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The 2) I was embarrassed at having a brother : is part of my quote so even though it shows repition of embarrarssment it is suppose to relate to my reason. My reason was about 1) The narrator’s embarrassment of having an invalid brother. So then shouldn't it relate to embarrassment. I'm thinking if I have to put a topic about embarrassment then I should have examples about embarrassment.


I am not sure I followed what you are trying to say.

I don't have the time nor the interest to read that long story. You need to cut down the repetition. If that means you don't provide a direct quote, then you don't provide a direct quote. You need to be direct. If that means a very short paragraph, then you have a very short paragraph. Your original essay is overly repetitious and overly wordy.

Good luck.

MountainHiker
Can u help me find another reason why it is the narrator's fault for the outcome of the story?

I need 3 reason to do this essay correctly. My second paragraph is incorrect for reason. The others are correct. I just need one more good reason why it is the narrator's fault. But first, is there anyone with the time to read the whole story?
phu53,

Sorry, you got to read the story yourself. In all honesty, I have too much of my own reading to do. I am sure if you read it slowly, the answers will be there.

MountainHiker
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Hey MountainHiker are you a teacher or something?
Nope, neither one. Emotion: smile
I have too much of my own reading to do.....I thought that means you are like a teacher or something. Emotion: surprise
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I have business stuff to read--magazines, newspapers, and books. I am swamped.

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