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Hi,

I wrote a paragraph for my English teacher and I will need to give it to her tomorrow .

This paragraph is about responsibility:

A responsible person is someone who makes good decisions about things, someone who can be trusted to do things that they are supposed to.
Do you think it is good for someone to be like that?
I think it is good to be like that because the responsible person always does what is necessary on time , it is good habit.
Do you think you are like that?
I think that I'm responsible person and I will prove it to my English teacher in future.

Summary , I learnt a lesson in my English project and I promise I will be more responsible in next time.

Thanks.
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I think your paragraph is pretty good. There are a few touches that could improve it, though.

In the first sentence, I would suggest a dash instead of a comma--suggesting an added on thought to reinforce the first one. Also in that sentence "they are" should be "he or she is." This is because the antecedent of your pronoun "they" is actually "someone"which is a singular pronoun. So the pronoun referring to "someone" should be singular as well. This distinction, however, is becoming less and less important-especially in spoken or informal English.

Your second sentence is actually two sentences with a comma between them. This is called a comma splice in US usage. So there should be a period (or full stop, if you're studying British usage) after "time." Then "It is a good habit." is your second sentence. The article is needed there--"a" good habit.

An article is needed in the fourth sentence as well. "I think that I'm a responsible person..." Again, an American speaker would say "in the future," but you are probably studying with a British usage teacher, in which case "in future" would be the way it is phrased.

Finally, in your summary one would say, "...I will be more responsible the next time."
Thanks
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Why don't you rewrite it based on the comments you were given.
A responsible person is someone who makes good decisions about things, someone who can be trusted to do things that they are supposed to.
Do you think it is good for someone to be like that?
I think it is good to be like that because the responsible person always does what is necessary on time . it is good habit.
Do you think you are like that?
I think that I'm responsible person and I will prove it to my English teacher in future.

Summary , I learnt a lesson in my English project and I promise I will be more responsible next time.
Something other to fix un a paragraph?
What do you advice me to do that a letter or stay with a paragraph ?

Thanks.
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A responsible person is someone who makes good decisions about things, someone who can be trusted to do things that what they are supposed to.

Do you think it is good for someone to be like that?

I think it is good to be like that because the responsible person always does what is necessary on time. It is good habit. I don't agree that it's a habit. It's a characteristic.

Do you think you are like that?

I think that I'm a responsible person and I will prove it to my English teacher in future.

In summary , I learnt a lesson from my English project and I promise I will be more responsible in the future. (or "the" next time)
I can write :"I think it is good to be like that because the responsible person always does what is necessary on time. It is good habit and characteristic."
is it right?

Secondly what do you advice me to make that a letter and add the name who's I wrote that or a paragraph to stay with it ?

Thnaks a lot
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